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-untitled 'hell script'- (1 Viewer)

salvothasock

Senior Member
[Please ignore crappy setup and lack of scene descriptions, i hope youll figure out the message/ I plan on filming scenes that at first glance clash, but actually fit with this script, its all voices, the unnamed lines are other people talking in the bar...]

N-Narrator
A-Andy
S-Stalker
R-Reid


INSERT:
montage footage

N
we pull up, together
his stalker is already there, waiting
i didnt know who he was at the time
i shook his hand anyway
walk into the bar
his stalker leads the way, we follow
we sit down, and look at the barflies

S
so, andy, where do you live?

A
just down the road from here

N
i dont say another word for twenty minutes

S
blah blah blah i fly planes all the time

R
uh huh

S
blah blah planes arent cheap

R
uh huh

S
what do you think the worst crash ever recorded was?

R
dont know

N
this guy, this guy here, a little boring

S
so, as it went in december of '88, flight 944 blah blah blah

R
yeah

S
it was a freak accident, there wasnt any way the pilots could have blah blah blah

R
yeah

N
reid is either liking this guy, or just afraid... im better than this guy

Ha!

N
no that was weird, whatever

musta been the booze!

N
liquor makes people forget their problems
what makes me so different?
im better than these people
prove it

son of a gun!

N
im satan?

oh gee

N
i hate this, i just came here to relax
well you cant
not now

hmm

N
they want me to go to heaven

(silence)

N
gotcha!
no, thats not me

(lots of inane chatter)

N
i am in heaven

no

N
i am in hell

bingo, thats it sue!

N
well i deserve it, i musta done something
hes been here for a while thats why hes so laid back, hes not rushing to get anywhere, he knows hes stuck here in hell

yay!

N
is that what they want?
is this a trick?
how do i know what to think?

bubye my friend

N
just forget it, ive had enough
no, youll never get it
just sit back and take it all in
i want to go back to god

hahah!

N
these people suck, they must be miserable, want me to be miserable

oh

N
no matter what, the truth makes them talk
they sold their souls in another life, this is another chance for them
i almost did that too i think

yeah

N
i want to be good!
you cant youre evil
ok, the best thing will happen
hell will freeze over, well be stuck for eternity
im in hell, they know it, were all in hell
they know they can read minds, every second someone
new finds out theyre in hell, were all in this together
i am set for life

there is a way though...

show god you care...

stand up and scream out all your sins, sorry sorry sorry, take me back!

no, i cant do that, thats crazy

A
seeya reid

R
seeya tomorrow andy

S
hey, nice meeting ya, seeya around

hahaha

END

Possible Titles:
Second
Seasons of Paranoia
Clashing of Closure
Voices
 

KevinTufo

Senior Member
Eh... Can you say anoying? I couldn't even get threw the whole script because it doesn't even look like a script...
ANd what the hell (Get it? GET IT?? No....?) is the deal with the 'blah blah blah'? Were you actually too lazy to write down some lines...
 

salvothasock

Senior Member
*cough cough*
ahem

ya man, youre prolly right, lord knows i always be wrong, i tries so hardy, i tries so hardy to do the way peeps wants things to be... but i keeps falling down go boom

:roll:
 
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saintoflight

I understand that kinda like my brain not I like it and I get where youre at. Like lots do again.
 
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