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This human animal (1 Viewer)

Llyralen

Senior Member
We walk upright
Our speech produces humor
We enroll in institutes of learning
Our clothes that our clever hands make
cover most of our weaknesses
Or strategically reveal
the deeper mask of human ego
sex being the one act when
it appeals to us to remember
We are animals

All our coolness
and rationalization
every second that we spend
pretending we have no fear
No fear like meer animals fear
Makes us also cruel
Cruel because
in the daily hustle
Of creating the delusion
That we won’t die
we forget our compassion
We try to elevate ourselves
above the preciousness of life!

Today I heard a scientist say
serial killers show no fear
they show no sadness
Yes, feelings we didn’t want
But now I know our fear
is what makes us human
our altruistic self is animal
the part that knows fear
knows death love and kindness
The animal is what connects us
the animal that suckled an infant
the animal that howls
for my love when you die


The animal makes me human
 
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Llyralen

Senior Member
I think I’m moving this to Poet’s showcase where everyone seems to be reading tonight. A could keep chewing at it, but I’m pretty happy with it.
However, if you’ve got ideas, of course let me hear them.
 

Darren White

co-owner and admin
Staff member
Co-Owner
Poems placed in the Workshop will receive thorough critique. Maybe not the second they are posted, but yes, they will eventually.
I moved it to the Showcase for you :)
 
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ritudimrinautiyal

Senior Member
We walk upright
Our speech produces humor
We enroll in institutes of learning
Our clothes that our clever hands make
cover most of our weaknesses
Or strategically reveal
the deeper mask of human ego
sex being the one act when
it appeals to us to remember
We are animals

We are animals
We are born, we will die
all our coolness
and rationalization
every second that we spend
pretending we have no fear
No fear like meer animals fear
Makes us also cruel
Cruel because
in the daily hustle
Of creating the delusion
That we won’t die
we forget our compassion
We try to elevate ourselves
above the preciousness of life!

Today I heard a scientist say
serial killers show no fear
they show no sadness
Yes, feelings we didn’t want
But now I know our fear
is what makes us human
our altruistic self is animal
the part that knows fear
knows death love and kindness
The animal is what connects us
the animal that suckled an infant
the animal that howls
for my love when you die


The animal makes me human

My Gosh you wrote our hearts. We deserve your writings dear. Humans as animals, we know fear, bind to know, love, care. Wolves howl for their dearones whom die, how are we better than them.... except our brain a bit superior.
Lovely poem.
Keep writing.
Good luck
Ritu
 

Llyralen

Senior Member
My Gosh you wrote our hearts. We deserve your writings dear. Humans as animals, we know fear, bind to know, love, care. Wolves howl for their dearones whom die, how are we better than them.... except our brain a bit superior.
Lovely poem.
Keep writing.
Good luck
Ritu

Thank you, Ruth! I’m so glad it struck a chord with you! The idea do for me too... I hope I did justice to what I truely feel is the thing worth fighting for about us humans... which is everything that makes us belong to the class of mammals, actually and gives us our humanity. Ugh hopefully the poem spoke for it! /hugs and I so appreciate your poetry and just want to see more!
 

ritudimrinautiyal

Senior Member
Thank you, Ruth! I’m so glad it struck a chord with you! The idea do for me too... I hope I did justice to what I truely feel is the thing worth fighting for about us humans... which is everything that makes us belong to the class of mammals, actually and gives us our humanity. Ugh hopefully the poem spoke for it! /hugs and I so appreciate your poetry and just want to see more!

Hi Llyralen,
I felt sensitiveness in your poem. Keep writing dear. Our writings are those passages where we express and listen as well, so those should stay ever continuing. Hope to see that more.
Good luck
Ritu ( not Ruth dear)
 
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