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The Night's Embrace (1 Viewer)


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Ah! a pagan delight... Nice use of rhyme- also I liked how you separated the piece or gave it a long pause, from narration to dialogue. I totally enjoyed this piece, being the Buddhist Taoist pagan that I am.

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Hi Bob,

I appreciate your feedback. I'm a big fan of Gothic literature and poetry, so thought I'd try my hand.


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I very much appreciated the discipline in which this piece was written. The form greatly benefits from the effort you have made to ensure that the rhythm and the flow are so tight with very little unconformity of metre. That being said I feel that at times some of the rhyme can feel a little forced, which does create a certain amount of jarring moments for me as the reader.

Like others in your readership I really dig the Gothic nature to the piece, but perhaps would suggest that because of this the piece doesn’t feel of it’s time. Is there away your could merge contemporary with the Gothic?

Hope this helps