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The Miracle Team (1 Viewer)

Abishai100

Senior Member
American storytelling is much about wrought glories, and I wanted to return from retirement to try to generate an 'Americana tale' of great tectonic proportions, and I hope you'll consider it an attempt at modernized democracy dogma! Thanks so much for your valued readership and commentaries over the years,



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Arnie was part of a high school basketball team which had the chance to make it to the state championship for the first time in 20 years, and it was once considered the greatest American high school basketball program in the country, but crimes and steroids allegations destroyed the program and made it dwindle completely. Arnie was a freshman when his East High Cougars were suddenly touted to win the state title very soon, and now that he's a junior year student, in 11th grade, and is considered the finest shooting guard in the nation, he's dreaming of bringing back unexpected glory to the really deflated team. Arnie's coach, Coach K, explained that if the Cougars brought back honor to the program, the people of the town would be equally restored to a sense of excitement.

Arnie made a serious commitment to show up to practice every day early that junior year. He wore special New Balance sneakers and distributed NBA superstar playing cards to his teammates to get them psyched for the state title competition. His teammates meanwhile were doing quite well. When Arnie was a freshman, he was part of a group of freshman and a few sophomores who're anticipated to become great achievers in high school basketball. These same teammates were now all juniors and seniors, 11th and 12th grade students, and they started to feel the spiritual spiking that their captain and guard Arnie was creating for the Cougars. They responded with elegant zone play and efficient scoring when Arnie provided the right assists and the right posting to create shooting holes for Arnie's wondrous three-point distant shooting.

Arnie is obviously slated to become a state hero for his high school basketball team, however, he's now harboring a tragic flaw. You see, Arnie suffers from kleptomania and it's remained untreated since Arnie can't afford to see a shrink. In fact, Arnie has taken the bus into the city on six different occasions since his freshman year at East High, pulling out clown masks and walking into the city Bank with toy guns filled with corrosive acid and proceeding to steal thousands of dollars from the safe boxes. The bank patrons are mostly very wealthy aristocratic city dwellers, and some are reputed to have questionable ties to the underworld of crime in the big city, and Arnie has fashioned himself a special Robin Hood oriented social mystique and status as the press glorified Clown of Class ("CC").

Arnie's now thinking of how to finely balance his crime world identity with his junior year East High Cougars duty to lead his program back to basketball glory and prestige. Will he tell his coach of his dark side? Arnie has decided you see to use basketball success to outshine and erase his involvement with crime. After all, it's not too too inconceivable to imagine that a bank robber touted in the media as a Robin Hood can find a nifty way to leave behind his dark side of kleptomaniac circus act. Arnie must now focus and use basketball to create a special niche for American idealism, and though this may sound like a story about average restoration, it may just be in fact a tall tale of ambition wrenching.

Arnie and the Cougars make it to the finals of the state championship and are now prepared to face their main rival, the Millville Dragons. The Dragons feature a brutish center named Rack who simply doesn't miss rebound and layups when given the good inside zone passes. Arnie psyches his team up by encouraging them to block out these inside passes and then simultaneously create seams for Arnie to take multiple dagger threes. The plan works and the Cougars are leading the Dragons 99-98 with just 10 seconds left to play when Dragons superstar center Rack hits a key shocking layup, and is fouled and makes the damned foul shot. The Dragons now lead 101-99 with just 4 seconds left to play. Arnie's entire life is on the line now, friends.

Arnie dribbles the ball up to the offense side very fast and throws a quick pass to the Cougars center and wildly signals him to throw it back to him very quickly, giving him just the needed 2 seconds to throw up a miraculous ringing three, to give his team the groundbreaking 102-101 victory. His coach runs onto the court and hugs him as his fans cheer wildly. Arnie's girlfriend runs up to him and gives him a big Christian kiss, and Arnie now dreams of writing a story in the East High bugle about the real miracle of achieving American honor in a condition of rather complex design. The moral of the story is, never underestimate the little power of dramatic ego!

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"Money is everything" (Ecclesiastes)

 

Harper J. Cole

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I have to wonder how he gets away with his robberies if he takes the bus into the city (no getaway car)? I'd suggest fleshing out that side of the story a bit, building up the moral dilemma etc.

HJC
 

Serendipity

Senior Member
American storytelling is much about wrought glories, and I wanted to return from retirement to try to generate an 'Americana tale' of great tectonic proportions, and I hope you'll consider it an attempt at modernized democracy dogma! Thanks so much for your valued readership and commentaries over the years,



📖

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Arnie was part of a high school basketball team which had the chance to make it to the state championship for the first time in 20 years, and it was once considered the greatest American high school basketball program in the country, but crimes and steroids allegations destroyed the program and made it dwindle completely. Arnie was a freshman when his East High Cougars were suddenly touted to win the state title very soon, and now that he's a junior year student, in 11th grade, and is considered the finest shooting guard in the nation, he's dreaming of bringing back unexpected glory to the really deflated team. Arnie's coach, Coach K, explained that if the Cougars brought back honor to the program, the people of the town would be equally restored to a sense of excitement.

Arnie made a serious commitment to show up to practice every day early that junior year. He wore special New Balance sneakers and distributed NBA superstar playing cards to his teammates to get them psyched for the state title competition. His teammates meanwhile were doing quite well. When Arnie was a freshman, he was part of a group of freshman and a few sophomores who're anticipated to become great achievers in high school basketball. These same teammates were now all juniors and seniors, 11th and 12th grade students, and they started to feel the spiritual spiking that their captain and guard Arnie was creating for the Cougars. They responded with elegant zone play and efficient scoring when Arnie provided the right assists and the right posting to create shooting holes for Arnie's wondrous three-point distant shooting.

Arnie is obviously slated to become a state hero for his high school basketball team, however, he's now harboring a tragic flaw. You see, Arnie suffers from kleptomania and it's remained untreated since Arnie can't afford to see a shrink. In fact, Arnie has taken the bus into the city on six different occasions since his freshman year at East High, pulling out clown masks and walking into the city Bank with toy guns filled with corrosive acid and proceeding to steal thousands of dollars from the safe boxes. The bank patrons are mostly very wealthy aristocratic city dwellers, and some are reputed to have questionable ties to the underworld of crime in the big city, and Arnie has fashioned himself a special Robin Hood oriented social mystique and status as the press glorified Clown of Class ("CC").

Arnie's now thinking of how to finely balance his crime world identity with his junior year East High Cougars duty to lead his program back to basketball glory and prestige. Will he tell his coach of his dark side? Arnie has decided you see to use basketball success to outshine and erase his involvement with crime. After all, it's not too too inconceivable to imagine that a bank robber touted in the media as a Robin Hood can find a nifty way to leave behind his dark side of kleptomaniac circus act. Arnie must now focus and use basketball to create a special niche for American idealism, and though this may sound like a story about average restoration, it may just be in fact a tall tale of ambition wrenching.

Arnie and the Cougars make it to the finals of the state championship and are now prepared to face their main rival, the Millville Dragons. The Dragons feature a brutish center named Rack who simply doesn't miss rebound and layups when given the good inside zone passes. Arnie psyches his team up by encouraging them to block out these inside passes and then simultaneously create seams for Arnie to take multiple dagger threes. The plan works and the Cougars are leading the Dragons 99-98 with just 10 seconds left to play when Dragons superstar center Rack hits a key shocking layup, and is fouled and makes the damned foul shot. The Dragons now lead 101-99 with just 4 seconds left to play. Arnie's entire life is on the line now, friends.

Arnie dribbles the ball up to the offense side very fast and throws a quick pass to the Cougars center and wildly signals him to throw it back to him very quickly, giving him just the needed 2 seconds to throw up a miraculous ringing three, to give his team the groundbreaking 102-101 victory. His coach runs onto the court and hugs him as his fans cheer wildly. Arnie's girlfriend runs up to him and gives him a big Christian kiss, and Arnie now dreams of writing a story in the East High bugle about the real miracle of achieving American honor in a condition of rather complex design. The moral of the story is, never underestimate the little power of dramatic ego!

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"Money is everything" (Ecclesiastes)
This is very good. It kept me interested, wanting to keep reading to see what happened. Poor Arnie... His life of crime is going to be his end.
 
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