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The Early Bird Gets the Worm, but the Early Worm is Breakfast [adult/language] (1 Viewer)

kbsmith

Senior Member
Do I need another lover
Tell me where you’ve been
Gone all night and
You smell like weed and gin
I cleaned the whole house
Now you dirty it up again
Stumbled in late
dropped all your clothes in the den

Do I need another lover
Tell me where you’ve fucking been
God I want to love you harder
Tell me that you haven’t sinned

Worried
About you puking in a parking lot
Worried
About you driving while you’re all fucked up
Worried
About being all alone again
Worried
Tell me where you’ve fucking been

Do I need another lover
Tell me where you’ve been
I haven’t heard a word
Now you’re falling in at 6AM
I organized your things
Made a dinner that you didn’t eat
I missed you so I stayed awake
Hoping that you’d be ok

Do I need another lover
Tell me where you’ve fucking been
God I want to love you harder
Tell me that you haven’t sinned

Worried
About you sleeping in a parking lot
Worried
About you running through the rain five blocks
Worried
About being all alone again
Worried
Tell me where you’ve fucking been
 

Firemajic

Poetry Mentor
Staff member
Senior Mentor
Do I need another lover
Tell me where you’ve been
Gone all night and
You smell like weed and gin
I cleaned the whole house
Now you dirty it up again
Stumbled in late
dropped all your clothes in the den

Do I need another lover****
Tell me where you’ve fucking been
God I want to love you harder
Tell me that you haven’t sinned

Worried
About you puking in a parking lot
Worried
About you driving while you’re all fucked up
Worried
About being all alone again
Worried
Tell me where you’ve fucking been

Do I need another lover
Tell me where you’ve been
I haven’t heard a word
Now you’re falling in at 6AM
I organized your things
Made a dinner that you didn’t eat
I missed you so I stayed awake
Hoping that you’d be ok

Do I need another lover****
Tell me where you’ve fucking been
God I want to love you harder
Tell me that you haven’t sinned

Worried
About you sleeping in a parking lot
Worried
About you running through the rain five blocks
Worried
About being all alone again
Worried
Tell me where you’ve fucking been
****


Heeey kb! This is about as real, raw and ripped as it gets.. Full of rage, pain, betrayal and fear.. This poem roars the emotion, and the imagery is fierce... The *** Represents my favorite stanza and I like that it is repeated through out this poem and in the end line.. fabulously honest... love it! Sometimes life is not pretty, not wine and roses and you reflected the gritty, ugliness of betrayal verrrry well indeed.. Thank you..
 

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