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The Beastie Fade (1 Viewer)

rcallaci

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The Beastie Fade #16

on blackened wings
on we sings
of nicer days
and better things
why bite kick fight and shout
when no one cares what we s about

we question things
and now we doubts
what to do to makes it right
do we fly straights up
towards the lights
or adjust our sights
to pitch black nights

we thinks
and sinks
and thinks
and sinks

we licks our wounds
and accept our dooms
onwards we fly
we get zapped and we die
but we fights kicks and we shouts
knowing truly what we is abouts

crawling on sore bellies
with severed wings
on we sings on we sings
singing about ghastly ghoulish
queens and kings
and other nasty little things



Beastie Commentaries:

only ourselves loves us
god hates us
the devil taunts us
humans fears us
we walk the path ITS given us
but we adjusts when we musts


 
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Firemajic

Poetry Mentor
Staff member
Senior Mentor
The Beastie Fade #16

on blackened wings
on we sings
of nicer days
and better things
why bite kick fight and shout
when no one cares what we s about

we question things
and now we doubts
what to do to makes it right
do we fly straights up
towards the lights
or adjust our sights
to pitch black nights

we thinks
and sinks
and thinks
and sinks

we licks our wounds
and accept our dooms
onwards we fly
we get zapped and we die
but we fights kicks and we shouts
knowing truly what we is abouts

crawling on sore bellies
with severed wings
on we sings on we sings
singing about ghastly ghoulish
queens and kings
and other nasty little things



Beastie Commentaries:

only ourselves loves us
god hates us
the devil taunts us
humans fears us
we walk the path ITS given us



The message here is so relevant to the chaos in today's new world... It is hard to know which way to go, what to believe and who to trust... the gem in this poem rests in these dark words of wisdom:

We question things
and now we doubts
what to do to make it right
do we fly straights up
towards the lights
or adjust our sights
to pitch black nights

maybe the key to surviving sudden disasters, trauma, death and destruction is this: we adjust our sights...

love the rhyme scheme, it is chaotic, but it works with the internal rhyme to knit it all together... tight and fabulous...

with all due respect and love, Maestro... I disagree with the beasties commentary....we do walk the path that is given, but we still walk to the beat of our own dark drum....
 

rcallaci

Staff member
Administrator
Julia (aka Fire) and (grasshopper)

The beasties thanks you we s told our dims witted creator that we s can adjusts when we s must- so he added on a last line in commentaries--thanks to you our lovely lovely grasshopper.

a beastie shout to firesmajics and a warmest from bob
 

Darren White

co-owner and admin
Staff member
Co-Owner
It's like the beasties are a bit depressed. As if they aren't noticed anymore, and doubt themselves. While earlier they had such a devilish pleasure to do their beastie things. They have to constantly remind and motivate themselves to go on.
 

Pulse

Staff member
Senior Mentor
The beasties are convincing me that all nature is a subset of supernature, so it would be helpful to get supernatural beings on side.
 
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