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Telephone conversations (1 Viewer)

jjshell

Senior Member
Hi there,

In the context of a telephone conversation with no intercut, what are your advice in regards to the writing of such a scene? Using a layout like this takes way too many lines:
CHARACTER
Hello?

A pause

CHARACTER
No.

A pause.

etc.

Same goes for:
CHARACTER
Hello?
(then)
No.
(then)
etc.

I simply deal with it that way:

CHARACTER
Hello? No. etc.

Any recommendations?

Regards,

jj
 

mammamaia

Senior Member
none of those would pass muster... when only one side of the call is being heard, you do it like this:

JOE
Hello!...No...So, what do you
want me to do?...You know
I can't do that!...They'd crucify
me...
(bangs fist on desk)
I told you, I can't!...Get someone
else for the job.

...and so on...
 
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