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indianroads

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This sight looks good too, but I like the addition of the antagonist and the sales pitch at the end. I learmed about those from another site.

Anyway...have fun!

I always liked this blurb - which is actually a product description (I wonder if I should start a separate blurb/description thread?). It's for Andy Weir's Artemis:

Jasmine Bashara never signed up to be a hero. She just wanted to get rich.

Not crazy, eccentric-billionaire rich, like many of the visitors to her hometown of Artemis, humanity’s first and only lunar colony. Just rich enough to move out of her coffin-sized apartment and eat something better than flavored algae. Rich enough to pay off a debt she’s owed for a long time.

So when a chance at a huge score finally comes her way, Jazz can’t say no. Sure, it requires her to graduate from small-time smuggler to full-on criminal mastermind. And it calls for a particular combination of cunning, technical skills, and large explosions—not to mention sheer brazen swagger. But Jazz has never run into a challenge her intellect can’t handle, and she figures she’s got the ‘swagger’ part down.

The trouble is, engineering the perfect crime is just the start of Jazz’s problems. Because her little heist is about to land her in the middle of a conspiracy for control of Artemis itself.

Trapped between competing forces, pursued by a killer and the law alike, even Jazz has to admit she’s in way over her head. She’ll have to hatch a truly spectacular scheme to have a chance at staying alive and saving her city.

Jazz is no hero, but she is a very good criminal.

That’ll have to do.
 

Taylor

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I always liked this blurb - which is actually a product description (I wonder if I should start a separate blurb/description thread?). It's for Andy Weir's Artemis:

Jasmine Bashara never signed up to be a hero. She just wanted to get rich.

Not crazy, eccentric-billionaire rich, like many of the visitors to her hometown of Artemis, humanity’s first and only lunar colony. Just rich enough to move out of her coffin-sized apartment and eat something better than flavored algae. Rich enough to pay off a debt she’s owed for a long time.

So when a chance at a huge score finally comes her way, Jazz can’t say no. Sure, it requires her to graduate from small-time smuggler to full-on criminal mastermind. And it calls for a particular combination of cunning, technical skills, and large explosions—not to mention sheer brazen swagger. But Jazz has never run into a challenge her intellect can’t handle, and she figures she’s got the ‘swagger’ part down.

The trouble is, engineering the perfect crime is just the start of Jazz’s problems. Because her little heist is about to land her in the middle of a conspiracy for control of Artemis itself.

Trapped between competing forces, pursued by a killer and the law alike, even Jazz has to admit she’s in way over her head. She’ll have to hatch a truly spectacular scheme to have a chance at staying alive and saving her city.

Jazz is no hero, but she is a very good criminal.

That’ll have to do.

Yes I like it! They mention the word "rich" four times. That will attract a certain target market, like me. I love to read about rich people.

I think a thread would be good. You could get other people's opninions as well.
 

indianroads

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Yes I like it! They mention the word "rich" four times. That will attract a certain target market, like me. I love to read about rich people.

I think a thread would be good. You could get other people's opninions as well.

I like that blurb because it communicates the character so well. Yes, it's set on the Moon, which is an interesting setting, but Jazz drives the story.
 

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Cranked out another 1500 words in Chapter 19, leading my wife to worry how much over word budget I'll wind up for the novel. LOL

I wound up with a scene I hadn't really planned at the moment, but it had to come sometime. Many chapters earlier, the MC was bullied into doing something which the discerning reader would expect to have negative consequences. I couldn't leave that hanging, and it turned out this was a good place to explore the ramifications.

In the middle I wrote a paragraph I call "eating words". Eating words is writing something that isn't essential to advance the story's action, but is (hopefully) entertaining and/or scene setting. If you don't have enough parts of scenes that "eat words", you'll never get to 100K+ words for your novel. ;-)

I heard croaking by the riverbank from some huge, deformed frogs. They were flicking their tongues into the river and coming back out with fish of unappetizing appearance. Then a tongue flicked back out of the river and retracted holding one of the frogs. The rest scattered inland in a panic. One slammed directly into me, leaving a slimy mess on my pants. It dropped straight down, and I kicked it into the river, hoping the frog-eater would get it. I realized if I tried to wipe off my pants, I'd just get the mess on my hands. Then I'd have to go to the riverbank to wash off my hands. The tongue I'd just seen had been about a foot wide. I walked north with slimy pants.
 
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vranger

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Wrapped up Chapter 19 in my normal post-midnight writing session, which rounded out my word count at just over 96K. I'm definitely NOT going to wrap this up in the next 5K words. 10 might still do it, though. Regardless, 96K is a lot of writing behind me. :)

This is a book I started 12 years ago and had about 12K in not quite three chapters. I continued it in late September, so a lot of production since then.
 

indianroads

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Updated my website with a martial art story. Worked on the blurb/product description and got it to point where it’s not completely awful. Then finally, took a nap - the first editing pass starts tomorrow.
 

vranger

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I started out my "late night session" with the idea I'd kick off Chapter 20 just to get it in motion, since I'd taken a break over the weekend after polishing off Chapter 19. I scratched out 500 words, then got on a roll. Before I finished I had almost 1800 words and finished the scene. With what has happened in the story there, I "might" finish it off in this chapter and a bit more. With the trick the MC is going to use to conquer the climax, that doesn't have to be a lengthy passage.
 
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indianroads

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I am attempting radical surgery with a butter knife in a desperate race against time, bathed in the shimmering heat of the funeral pyre of my first attempt.

All normal here with the writing life.

Better a butter knife than a machete... or a table saw... or dynamite.

Keep plugging away, you'll get it.
 

Foxee

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Better a butter knife than a machete... or a table saw... or dynamite.

Keep plugging away, you'll get it.
You were right! I was able to move from butter knife to power sander and now I've just got to tighten the nuts a little more so that the pitch of the screaming reaches high C. Once that's done I can polish it and apply boot to push it out of the helicopter.

Thanks for the encouragement, I really wasn't sure this thing was going to make it!
 

indianroads

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You were right! I was able to move from butter knife to power sander and now I've just got to tighten the nuts a little more so that the pitch of the screaming reaches high C. Once that's done I can polish it and apply boot to push it out of the helicopter.

Thanks for the encouragement, I really wasn't sure this thing was going to make it!

I knew you could do it! Sounds awesome.
 

indianroads

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Reached the halfway mark of the first edit of my next novel.
A couple plot holes fixed, but nothing too drastic.
It's written somewhat lean, but I've still managed to pull 800 words out of it so far.
 

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