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Rock formations (1 Viewer)

dannyboy

Friends of WF
Underworld shadows, the movement of a hand
it touched my brow, the fever
smells of ochre and the litany
we will be here forever sung
as rain and wind steal particles of faith
carry them to the water’s edge,
set them adrift a million tiny babes
seeking the lagoon of some Pharaoh’s daughter.

When I was young in solemn oath
I did swear the bible and all the words
and fear to be truth-telling, sister, sister
you smiled and knew that lagoon would call to me
as soon as the necessary year’s accumulated
here now I float, touch my hand
and imprint a thousand caverns
sing to ensorcell any daughter’s haven.

Inside, in the shadows and rivulets that run
with all the actions done
handprints glow, red patterns discerned
by closing eyelids exposed to bright hope
all the while the caves chew the years
hollow the space to receive the bones
the heart a geologist watching solid steps
become the mists of a new age.
 

2020Syd2020

Senior Member
Hello,

I find this to be a really interesting piece. The fact that you’ve titled the piece Rock Formations reflects the constructs and institutions of organised religion. It creates that sense of constancy that religion can provide. There is something almost ritualistic about the language and the way the piece flows. The way in which the hand flows to the forehead immediately puts me in mind of the sign of the cross. It’s subtle and clever.

I haven’t much to say other than appreciation.

Cheers

Syd
 
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