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Poll for the War challenge (1 Viewer)

Which are your three favourite poems?

  • Doc, by jinxi

    Votes: 3 12.0%
  • War, by hoby

    Votes: 0 0.0%
  • Trenches and Sandcastles, by Nick

    Votes: 6 24.0%
  • Cross Lines (after Arlington), by Squalid Glass

    Votes: 2 8.0%
  • Resonating Sounds, by Baron

    Votes: 7 28.0%
  • What For?, by Martin

    Votes: 0 0.0%
  • Circle of Death, by Close Writer

    Votes: 0 0.0%
  • The Viral Revolution, by Gumby

    Votes: 6 24.0%
  • The Fifth Trumpet, by The Fuhrer02

    Votes: 3 12.0%
  • The Sergeant's Prayer, by MJ. Preston

    Votes: 5 20.0%
  • Answers, Lady S

    Votes: 4 16.0%
  • THROW ANOTHER BONE ON THE PILE, by Boddaert

    Votes: 2 8.0%
  • Limerick, by Olly Buckle

    Votes: 2 8.0%
  • Untitled, by beary cool

    Votes: 4 16.0%
  • behind toledo, by RM Americano

    Votes: 1 4.0%
  • Untitled, by Glass Pencil

    Votes: 4 16.0%
  • The Left Behind, by Leyline

    Votes: 6 24.0%
  • Them's Fightin' Words, by ChestersDaughter

    Votes: 2 8.0%
  • War, by InsanityStrickenWriter

    Votes: 1 4.0%
  • Propaganda, by Nellie

    Votes: 1 4.0%
  • War of the World, by apple

    Votes: 7 28.0%
  • In The Silence, by chicadee123405

    Votes: 2 8.0%
  • Chase Hope, by guy_ faukes

    Votes: 2 8.0%

  • Total voters
    25
  • Poll closed .

Olly Buckle

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Trying to post this thread got to me yesterday morning, first time I forgot to make it multiple questions, second to put a closing time on it, third the computer simply wouldn't accept it, still fourth time lucky.

It seems the poems fall into two categories, the particular and the general, personally it is the particular which affect me most.
Doc, by Jinxi certainly works well, though it is very wordy in places, consider,

“Looking around at the few men who have managed to live through this”
Which could so easily be ‘Looking round at the few survivors’
Or,
“The supplies were supposed to arrive today
But we received word that they are not coming at all
We do not have enough food, warm clothing or ammunition
To make it through another day”
Which would be tidier, and more telling, as,

‘Supplies were supposed to arrive today.
We received word they are not coming at all.
We do not have food, clothing or ammunition
To make it through another day.’
Nevertheless there is an affinity with the subject that makes it one of my favourite poems.
MJ Preston’s “The sergeant’s prayer” is another, simple, it gets across the bewilderment of an ordinary man at what is happening.
I have not decided where my third vote will go yet, not to the person who thought a limerick a suitable form for a poem about war I feel, what was he thinking of.
 

Gumby

Staff member
Co-Owner
I am simply stunned by the number of entries and how each one captures a piece of my heart.
Well done, all! I am having a very, very hard time choosing only three.
 

MJ Preston

WF Veterans
There are so many different approaches and I am humbled that Olly would even mention me. Thanks Olly, though I hardly deserve it.

Apple's poem War of the World really stuck out for me because it speaks of war as though it is a living entity. From this I see a voracious monster that feeds the ego of man whilst beckoning his greed with riches and eating the innocents. Well done Apple! Your subtle ways invoked great thought from this old soldier.

It flattens little homes
with ego and heavy hammers,
proclaiming it’s truths for the winged wild
while pockets jingle


Glass Pencil's is short and hard which appealed to this impatient eye. Its aftermath and reference to the hounds that feast played well for me.

Where once stood scores there now stood none
all before a smoking gun
but bide, oh churl, the time and mission
all become at your admission

I can't remember who my third vote was. I was so tired, but Leyline's "The Left Behind", Baron's "Resonating Sounds" stuck out for me.

Overall an excellent soup of different ideas and ideals.
 

Guy Faukes

WF Veterans
The ones who got my votes for the following reasons:

The despair and yearning for hope in MJ Preston's piece was palpable.

Leyline's was chocked full of well executed mini-narratives; every single of of them was sobering.

apple's writing skill is enviable!

There are definitely some heavy hitters in this forum, glad to be in good company!
 

Jinxi

Senior Member
Doc, by Jinxi certainly works well, though it is very wordy in places, consider,

“Looking around at the few men who have managed to live through this”
Which could so easily be ‘Looking round at the few survivors’
Or,
“The supplies were supposed to arrive today
But we received word that they are not coming at all
We do not have enough food, warm clothing or ammunition
To make it through another day”
Which would be tidier, and more telling, as,

‘Supplies were supposed to arrive today.
We received word they are not coming at all.
We do not have food, clothing or ammunition
To make it through another day.’
Nevertheless there is an affinity with the subject that makes it one of my favourite poems.

Olly, I am honoured to have your vote on my poem. Thank you very much.
You are right, it is a bit wordy. Your rewrites would have been perfect. Thank you for your comments.

The entries are all outstanding. It is going to be so hard to decide!
 

bearycool

Senior Member
Wow, I didn't know there were that many people who signed up for this!

I'm going to have some trouble picking my top 3...
 

Patrick

WF Veterans
Apple, Lady S and Baron got my vote... votes?

Reasons: Apple's had some fantastic images, Baron's was a very fluent piece and Lady S's (lol @ how clumsy that is), had a unique and very good progression.

There were a lot of original and decent poems here, so well done to everybody who entered something.
 
I am not sure who voted for my poem or why, but thanks. As a newbie, to the website and to writing, it is a little daunting to just jump right in with my thoughts. The emotions of the writers here is amazing. I need to re-evaluate everything I thought I knew about poetry and writing. Please be patient with my ignorance.
 

Olly Buckle

Mentor
Patron
I am not sure who voted for my poem or why, but thanks. As a newbie, to the website and to writing, it is a little daunting to just jump right in with my thoughts.
Don't worry, this is a challenge rather than a competition, it is yourself you are challenging. A poll and a winner are necessary to set the next challenge, but in many ways we are all winners if we stretch ourselves a little and learn a little.
 

Bruno Spatola

Senior Member
I voted for Nick, Boddaert and Glass Pencil. Those three just really spoke to me personally, and for zat, I sank you all :p
 

Bruno Spatola

Senior Member
Haha, sorry. I started thinking in a little 'Allo 'Allo!-style accent as I wrote it all of a sudden. It amused me. . .slightly. Bruno is a Germanic name too. I just feel a bit German today.
 
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Bruno Spatola

Senior Member
Oh ja. I love a bit of German sausage in ze morning. Nahhhh, but I've always wanted to go there. Beautiful country; beautiful people (in travel documentaries at least).

Any way, this was an interesting challenge. War was a good prompt, clearly. It evoked some lovely imagery :).
 

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