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Jk_Sl

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2020Syd2020

Senior Member
Hello,

I like this a lot, it’s probably my favourite from you. Your structure and the way in which you utilise lineation to really make this flow works great.

My only suggestion would be to play around with:

but one, one is all it took

I would separate this into two lines:

but one-
one is all it took.

Cheers

Syd
 

Jk_Sl

Senior Member
Hello,

I like this a lot, it’s probably my favourite from you. Your structure and the way in which you utilise lineation to really make this flow works great.

My only suggestion would be to play around with:

but one, one is all it took

I would separate this into two lines:

but one-
one is all it took.

Cheers

Syd

Thank You Syd that means a lot,
editing on phone has been fun.
I’ll try that later.
Thank You [emoji120]
 
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