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My Boys - A Parent's View (1 Viewer)

Anita M Shaw

Friends of WF
MY BOYS

My Fighting, trashing,
Eating machines
Lazy, crazy,
Video game fools
Teasing, playful,
Silly comedians

Stay up late;
Sleep till noon
The TV
Reigns supreme

The bathroom Is
Boys' Territory
Except
When it's time to
Clean it!

One kid Walks
With confidence high
Peers at the world
With a humorous,
Cynical eye
Not necessarily
His brothers' pal
But--
He generally is
His mother's!

The next
While not terribly shy
Keeps his world
Deep inside
No master of sports
(Or any chore!)
He adores to toil
In the soil
Bugs and beetles,
Ants and plants . . .
But FIRSTLY
He loves
Anything edible!

The youngest -
Ah, such a rogue
With wide expressive
Puppy Eyes
Daddy's boy
A pal and a pest
Instigating
Amusing
Little Prankster
Is The Pookster!

The Eldest -
My stepson
Finally nesting
On
His
Own
Discovering, now,
After
All
These
Years
That
Yes, yes, yes!!!
We Really
Did
KNOW
What We
Were Talking
About!

Yep
They nag, and test,
and rebel,
They fight, and trash,
and
Inhale
My groceries before
I get them
In the door!

Ah, they love
To laugh.
And Drive Me
Looney

But
NIX them
And
I'm
NOTHING!
 

Anita M Shaw

Friends of WF
Thanks mayko and Jen, I guess that's the territory of a parent, loving the monkeys despite the irritations!

They were a handful back then! They are all grown now, and the little Pookster has a little one of his own as does the Eldest. Heh! They got a little taste of what it's like, but since they only have 1 girl each, it's not the same as having four of any species! Lol!
 

Namyh

Senior Member
Anita - This had that wonderful clipped rhythm of living and I know well from where you come. You've captured the passion in a human heart and with words made it a shining gem. I loved it. Namyh
 

RC James

Senior Member
The next
While not terribly shy
Keeps his world
Deep inside
No master of sports
(Or any chore!)
He adores to toil
In the soil
Bugs and beetles,
Ants and plants . . .
But FIRSTLY
He loves
Anything edible!

Lovely character study - I like the way you've portrayed them all
in short - stacatto like lines - very effective.

Yep
They nag, and test,
and rebel,
They fight, and trash,
and
Inhale
My groceries before
I get them
In the door!

Ah, they love
To laugh.
And Drive Me
Looney

But
NIX them
And
I'm
NOTHING!

And the end is a winner - though I would "nix" the caps - for me, not needed - Enjoyed - RC
 

Mrcheese

Senior Member
MY BOYS

My Fighting, trashing,
Eating machines
Lazy, crazy,
Video game fools
Teasing, playful,
Silly comedians

Stay up late;
Sleep till noon
The TV
Reigns supreme

The bathroom Is
Boys' Territory
Except
When it's time to
Clean it!

One kid Walks
With confidence high
Peers at the world
With a humorous,
Cynical eye
Not necessarily
His brothers' pal
But--
He generally is
His mother's!

The next
While not terribly shy
Keeps his world
Deep inside
No master of sports
(Or any chore!)
He adores to toil
In the soil
Bugs and beetles,
Ants and plants . . .
But FIRSTLY
He loves
Anything edible!

The youngest -
Ah, such a rogue
With wide expressive
Puppy Eyes
Daddy's boy
A pal and a pest
Instigating
Amusing
Little Prankster
Is The Pookster!

The Eldest -
My stepson
Finally nesting
On
His
Own
Discovering, now,
After
All
These
Years
That
Yes, yes, yes!!!
We Really
Did
KNOW
What We
Were Talking
About!

Yep
They nag, and test,
and rebel,
They fight, and trash,
and
Inhale
My groceries before
I get them
In the door!

Ah, they love
To laugh.
And Drive Me
Looney

But
NIX them
And
I'm
NOTHING!
You gave a lot of inspiration in the piece and it shows with how you wrote about a true day to day life of two lads an excellent write well done on this piece.
 

Anita M Shaw

Friends of WF
Thank you all for your kind words for my humble poem! There are four boys actually. Back then, I had the patience and stamina to keep up with them. And I miss those days.
 
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