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May I Never Die (1 Viewer)

LoveofWriting

Senior Member
May I never die in the hands of the white man.
He will try to capture me or put me down.
May I never lie in front of the white man.
He will make sure I fall to the ground.

Things won’t change in front of the white man.
When all he has is a fistful of ships and whips.
When he smites his enemy with anger and step.
That is when I will come to saddening grips.

May I never die in the hands of the white man.
He will try to capture me or put me down.
May I never lie in front of the white man.
He will make sure I succumb to the ground.

If I let the white man give me his wife’s hand.
And end up dancing with his concubine wife.
I might be feeling chosen for a little while.
Or it’s back to being cut with a rusty knife.

May I never die in the hands of the white man.
He will try to capture me or put me down.
May I never lie in front of the white man.
He will make sure I collapse to the ground.
 

Darren White

co-owner and admin
Staff member
Co-Owner
This is a beautiful poem, it has great rhythm as if it is made for performance or song lyrics.
 

petergrimes

Senior Member
Hi Love of writing, really powerful stuff, I agree with Darren about the rhythm, it's almost hypnotic (in a good way) the repetition, like a mantra, growing in strength each time each line is uttered, adds power to what becomes an almost overwhelming wave of conviction. Good work, all the best PG
 
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