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Letters of old (1 Viewer)

zbrown210

Senior Member
Words of the heart written in black.

Bits of conscience, scrawled on paper.

What voice holds back, doth let it come in
verse.

Sentence after sentence flowing with ease.

Till at last you arrive at the bottom of the sheet.

With a sincerely, and flowing initials, off it goes for another to read.


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happy-hippie

Senior Member
Words of the heart written in black.

Bits of conscience, scrawled on paper.

What voice holds back, doth let it come in
verse.

Sentence after sentence flowing with ease.

Till at last you arrive at the bottom of the sheet.

With a sincerely, and flowing initials, off it goes for another to read.


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I liked the piece. There are so many things I could say on paper that I could never say out loud. Thank you for sharing.
 

ritudimrinautiyal

Senior Member
Words of the heart written in black.

Bits of conscience, scrawled on paper.

What voice holds back, doth let it come in
verse.

Sentence after sentence flowing with ease.

Till at last you arrive at the bottom of the sheet.

With a sincerely, and flowing initials, off it goes for another to read.


Sent from my SM-G950U using Tapatalk

Yeah I too agree words of heart can be more easily expressed through pen than orally.... It's tough orally.

Nice poem.
Keep writing.

Good luck
Ritu
 

2020Syd2020

Senior Member
I agree with Dannyboy on doth, I don’t think it fits in with the word choice of the rest of the piece.

Overall though, I like this

Cheers

Syd
 

zbrown210

Senior Member
Words of the heart written in black.

Bits of conscience scrawled on paper.

What voice holds back, let it come in

verse.

Sentence after sentence flowing with ease.

Till at last you arrive at the bottom of the sheet.

With a sincerely, and flowing initials, off it goes for another to read.

Sent from my SM-G950U using Tapatalk
 

Annie. Marie

Senior Member
I like how you put life into a very simple action. I like that its a poem that talks about itself. Very clever.
For an edit, I would look for another word other than "scrawled" in L2. It's hard on the tongue, when I feel like the rest of the poem flows very nicely.
Thank you for allowing us to read!

-Annie
 
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