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Lethal's Essay On Destiny (1 Viewer)

Lethal

Member
Well, here's my essay on destiny. I personally think it's ok. I was wondering if you guys could give me crits on it, as well. Cause it doesn't seem fully finished.

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The fundamental belief behind Christianity is that behind everything, there is some divine intervention from God. They believe that God created the earth, that he planted the first seed, and chose the first beings to be put on earth. Basically, we are his puppets and he is our master. The only difference being supposedly is that we have choice, unlike the puppets that the master controls solely.
In the bible it says that God has a destiny for all of us, that one-way or another we will complete it. But, what is choice, if we supposedly have a set destiny, which we cannot alter. Supposedly God has a divine plan for all of us, and that everything will work out the way he planned; once again, where is the choice in that?
I believe Destiny is what you make of it; that every choice you make, affects the outcome of your destiny. Why give human beings a choice, or a voice, when it doesn’t affect us at all? I’m not trying to disprove God, or state that he was not the creator, as that is not my point. I’m merely trying to prove, that we do have a choice and that the sooner we realize this, the better for us. Humanity is blind in its effects, as it never takes a moment to look at what it just ran over, or the ramifications of what it might do next.
I think everyone should take a moment to look over everything they’ve done in their life and ask themselves if they like the person they’ve become. Personally, I look back, and see a plethora of bad mistakes I’ve made and wonder how I’ve lived this long. Although, one good thing has come from all this, I’ve learned from my mistakes; call it singular evolution if you wish.
Amy Candy penned it best when she said, “You should always learn, with life comes wisdom and with wisdom comes the courage to live your life selflessly. The more you learn about yourself and the experiences surrounding your life the more opportunities you have to make your life better and more fulfilling.”
 

Vixen

Senior Member
Your right, it needs a solid thesis, a strong controlling idea, more body paragraphs, and a conclusion, in short, try an outline.

As for your conception of destiny. I believe two types of destiny exist. Liken this to a bruning candle if you will. The candle will eventually run out of wick, or oil. This is the first type of destiny. However, the candle may be put out by a strong wind. The second type of destiny is the one we choose for ourselves.

Everyone will eventaully die. This is destined. As for How it occurs, and when, and after what sort of life, that's determined by Free Will.
 
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