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Legally Tender (1 Viewer)

arkayye

Senior Member
A change of pace, a shift in gears:

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The key of currency
is the changing of hands,
a baton passed on
in constant motion,
that binds together
all its participants.

A fresh, crisp bill
is a virgin still,
between your fingers;
whose anticipation
and epic journey
are yet to unfold.




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Please be tender, I am barely legal
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Humour with a twist. Hope you enjoy.

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Ariel

WF Veterans
Arkayye, this is pretty funny. I'm getting tired so I'm not going to be able to give you a very coherent and helpful critique at this time.
 

Vitaly Ana

WF Veterans
Clever title Arkayye. Re: the poem as a whole, I like it all but especially like Stanza 2 standing alone.

Thanks for sharing!

:kiwi-fruit:
 

arkayye

Senior Member
Arkayye, this is pretty funny. I'm getting tired so I'm not going to be able to give you a very coherent and helpful critique at this time.

Thank you for your interest and kind words., Hopefully, this poem's "next time" will be here soon. You are much appreciated.
 

arkayye

Senior Member
Arkayye, this is pretty funny. I'm getting tired so I'm not going to be able to give you a very coherent and helpful critique at this time.

I'm glad you see the humour in this. Rumour is, there are other underlying truths that would be too drastic to share where it not treated light heartedly. Thank you for sharing your immediate thoughts. Hopefully more will come next time. Cheers.
 

Blade

Creative Area Specialist (Fiction)
WF Veterans
I like it. Nice and crisp and to the point.

Should be "is" and not "are" in the last line.
 

Snowball13

Senior Member
Should be "is" and not "are" in the last line.
I disagree.
It says "...whose anticipation and epic journey [word in doubt] yet to unfold."
Since we have two things here (anticipation and epic journey), we need the plural form. Therefore it has to be "are", not "is".
 

Blade

Creative Area Specialist (Fiction)
WF Veterans
I disagree.
It says "...whose anticipation and epic journey [word in doubt] yet to unfold."
Since we have two things here (anticipation and epic journey), we need the plural form. Therefore it has to be "are", not "is".

Hmmm. OK. The stanza moves from singular (bill) to plural (fingers) to plural (anticipation and epic journey) I suppose the semicolon splits the stanza so the verb in the last line is legitimate as plural. My apologies for taking the stanza as a sentence.:subdued:
 

arkayye

Senior Member
Hmmm. OK. The stanza moves from singular (bill) to plural (fingers) to plural (anticipation and epic journey) I suppose the semicolon splits the stanza so the verb in the last line is legitimate as plural. My apologies for taking the stanza as a sentence.:subdued:

The bill is the legal tender, the people's fingers handle that one bill, whose epic journey and anticipation are about to come to pass; and being personification, the bill, is filled with that anticipation. And yes, that second half of the stanza was a dependent clause which qualifies the statement in the first half of the stanza. Cheers.
 
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