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Illusion (1 Viewer)

ritudimrinautiyal

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Though she was a prisoner, her opportunity for freedom appeared. And while it was difficult to leave all that she had ever known, she spread her wings and flew into the unknown perhaps, only to enter another trap……. Lets hope she’s able to live her dream.
Yes. Let's hope for that, too many humming birds are going through that.

Thanks for the read dear.
 
Yes. Let's hope for that, too many humming birds are going through that.

Thanks for the read dear.
I really like this piece, Ritu.

It makes me think about someone working really hard to get out of a difficult situation or to try to improve their life. They go through so much and finally get to the next level and ... then there are those who will still criticize and shame for not being better or doing better. People often judge others for what they don't have and what they haven't accomplished instead seeing how far they've come or appreciating the good about where they are now.
 
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ritudimrinautiyal

Senior Member
I really like this piece, Ritu.

It makes me think about someone working really hard to get out of a difficult situation or try to improve their life. They go through so much and finally get to the next level and ... then there are those who will still criticize and shame for not being better or doing better. People often judge others for what they dont' have and what they haven't accomplished instead seeing how far they've come or appreciating the good about where they are now.
I really really like your version Happy. Now I would like to share my version as a reader of my poem. It is like flying off from one form of patriyarchal cage to another, thinking it as sky, what her vision through the little cage had formed.
But that is the only way, the humming birds: little creatures struggling through patriyarchy, can learn.

Thanks for the read dear.
Ritu
 
I really really like your version Happy. Now I would like to share my version as a reader of my poem. It is like flying off from one form of patriyarchal cage to another, thinking it as sky, what her vision through the little cage had formed.
But that is the only way, the humming birds: little creatures struggling through patriyarchy, can learn.

Thanks for the read dear.
Ritu
Yeah, I see what you're saying. It's interesting ...shifting dreams help us to grow as we strive to reach them. Nice. It's funny how our prisons can help to shape our dreams.

patriyarchy is patriarchy; patriarchal
 
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darrellmoneyhon

Senior Member
I really like this piece, Ritu.

It makes me think about someone working really hard to get out of a difficult situation or to try to improve their life. They go through so much and finally get to the next level and ... then there are those who will still criticize and shame for not being better or doing better. People often judge others for what they don't have and what they haven't accomplished instead seeing how far they've come or appreciating the good about where they are now.
"...too many humming birds are going through that." Ritu, are we, the poets, the "humming" birds? Humming poetic words, like a song? Thanks happy hippie for the positive slant about the nobility of trying to grow. Even if the road to hell might be paved with good intention, at least that's some heavenly material to make a road with!
darrell
 

ritudimrinautiyal

Senior Member
"...too many humming birds are going through that." Ritu, are we, the poets, the "humming" birds? Humming poetic words, like a song? Thanks happy hippie for the positive slant about the nobility of trying to grow. Even if the road to hell might be paved with good intention, at least that's some heavenly material to make a road with!
darrell
Too many humming birds, too many meanings for each connection for each reader. I wrote it keeping the aspect of patriarchy in mind, you can draw some other connection... like that.

Thanks for the read Darrell
 
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