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I DIDN’T ASK FOR THIS (1 Viewer)

ladygarmadone17

Senior Member
I DIDNT ASK FOR TROUBLE

STORM CLOUDS FILL MY BRAIN

LIKE THE CHOIR PEWS OF A CHURCH

ONCE A HAPPY LARK, SURELY DEPRESSION

FOLLOWS ME ALL THE DAYS

MY LIFE HAS FLOURISHED

THEN I WAKE UP TO A CLAMORING CHOIR OF BIRDSONG

BUT EMPTY NESTS IN A GHOST TOWN

AND NAVY BLUE SKIES CONVINCE ME OTHERWISE

I WANT TO EXPLORE, I WANT TO SCREAM

I WANT TO LEAVE, BREAK FREE, BUT

NO

LEAVING A PROBLEM ONLY MAKES LIFE WORSE

DOESN’T IT

ID RATHER AVOID THE DAILY NEWS

THAN LISTEN TO ANYTHING OR ANYONE AT ALL

I BLOCK OUT THE SHADOWS OF DISAPPOINTMENT

GLIMMERINGS OF TRUTH

GLITTERED THROUGHOUT

A NEW NORMALITY, I MUST GET USED TO

BUT I DID NOT WANT


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Darkkin

WF Veterans
From a reader's standpoint, THE ALL CAPS REALLY make the piece hard to read. In internet speak, the narrator is yelling. It would be a very solid piece with reformatting, more impactful if all caps were removed. Illustrate the inner monologue through the formatting. Poetry is as much about the visual aspect as it is about the written. The piece is worth the edit.
 
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ladygarmadone17

Senior Member
Thanks I know it shouldn’t be like this, but I have no capital format editing software on my word processor. I’m afraid if I choose to retype word for word, it would take a huge amount of time and effort to remember what I just wrote.

That being said, I’ll try to retype it when I have the time.
Despite that I’m a capitalist at heart lol [emoji23]


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