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Hey Those Men There (1 Viewer)

ritudimrinautiyal

Senior Member
Hey those men there,
with certain kind of perspective.
Why do you all ultimately,
Turn out to be the same,
at the end trying to show,
that mask you are wearing,
Is, actually your face of a savior.
That when you love a woman,
you feel that, she should be cared
protected, that way,
And when you brutalise her, rape her,
thow acid over her.
You try to make her sin free that way.
Who gave you that degree, that license?
Why are you always, so sure of your words,
and feasibility of your acts?

Ritu Dimri Nautiyal
 
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2020Syd2020

Senior Member
Hey those men there,
with certain kind of perspective.
Why do you all ultimately, I think you need a word like do here
Turn out to be the same? Again I feel like you need a ? here
at the end trying to show,
that mask you are wearing,
Is, actually your the face of a savior.
That when you love a woman,
you feel that, she should be cared
protected, that way,
And when you brutalise her, rape her,
Put acid over her.
You try to make her sin free that way.
Who gave you that degree, that license?
That why are you always so sure of, I’d swap things around here
feasibility of your acts,
your words, your silence!!! I would lose the !!! It kind of sits funny following silence

Ritu Dimri Nautiyal

Hello, I like this a lot, it’s a potent piece that says a lot in a very small space. I’ve made a few comments in line for you,

Hope this helps

Cheers

Syd
 
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