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Family is everything (1 Viewer)

Jk_Sl

Senior Member
The ones you are born with
born from and torn from
also go to war with

Some distance creates
a fonder love
some just drives it away

Those old days
dusty records
music and love
mother and father
cooking in the kitchen

No cries to be heard
only ones of joy
never of despair

The back door open
all day for friends
and loved ones
to say hey

Friends were family
a bond deeper
then the ocean itself

Moments born in seconds
torn down in seconds
but last a lifetime

Nostalgia is hope
hope keeps me safe

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J.h
 
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Annie. Marie

Senior Member
"Nostalgia is hope.. hope keeps me safe"

So many times I will read one of your pieces and it specific lines will really hit home for me. I have an issue of living too much in the past and letting the skewed nostalgic memories give me a baseline/standard for the future.

My only critique would be in the 4th stanza to perhaps take out the word "maybe".

Great job. Thank you for sharing.

-Annie
 

Jk_Sl

Senior Member
Thank you very much,
You’re welcome.
I agree with the maybe.
I am very much like that too , finding it hard in letting go of damaging memories, that’s the beauty of poetry although my work isn’t perfect everyone has some not so amazing ones. It can be just one line from any poem to lift someone’s day.
Thank you again x
 

ritudimrinautiyal

Senior Member
The ones you are born with
born from and torn from
also go to war with

Some distance creates
a fonder love
some just drives it away

Those old days
dusty records
music and love
mother and father
cooking in the kitchen

No cries to be heard
only ones of joy
never of despair

The back door open
all day for friends
and loved ones
to say hey

Friends were family
a bond deeper
then the ocean itself

Moments born in seconds
torn down in seconds
but last a lifetime

Nostalgia is hope
hope keeps me safe

33f00ce8f08231d984ef52f0ba82e06f.jpg


J.h
Hi J

Moments born in seconds, torn down in seconds but last a lifetime. Great meaning.

Nice poem
Keep writing

Ritu
 

happy-hippie

Senior Member
The ones you are born with
born from and torn from
also go to war with

Some distance creates
a fonder love
some just drives it away

Those old days
dusty records
music and love
mother and father
cooking in the kitchen

No cries to be heard
only ones of joy
never of despair

The back door open
all day for friends
and loved ones
to say hey

Friends were family
a bond deeper
then the ocean itself

Moments born in seconds
torn down in seconds
but last a lifetime

Nostalgia is hope
hope keeps me safe

33f00ce8f08231d984ef52f0ba82e06f.jpg


J.h
Moments born in seconds...torn down in seconds...but lasts a lifetime... Love this line. so simple, so true

Nice poem. Thanks for sharing
 
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