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mr. ramstad

Senior Member
"Each room was as large and grand as the last and each were a testament of their own grandiosity, yet they all managed to retain a level of resemblance by way of oversaturated red colours. "
 

TheMightyAz

Mentor
"Each room was as large and grand as the last and each were a testament of their own grandiosity, yet they all managed to retain a level of resemblance by way of oversaturated red colours. "

It makes sense, other than it should be 'was' and not 'were'. You don't need to identify red as a colour. It's a bit clumsy in construct though, the words often falling over themselves. This is where it gets tricky to critique. Trying to alter something without losing the style of the original ...

Each room was as large and grand as the last, a testament to their own grandiosity, yet all managed to retain a level of similarity by way of the red paint used.

'A testament to their own grandiosity' is redundant there. You mention they're grand in the first part.
 

Phil Istine

WF Veterans
"Each room was as large and grand as the last and each were a testament of their own grandiosity, yet they all managed to retain a level of resemblance by way of oversaturated red colours. "

Each room was as large and grand as the last and each was a testament to its own grandiosity, yet they all managed to retain a level of resemblance by way of oversaturated red colours.

Once you change to 'each', you need to use the singular.

I'm not clear what you are saying after the 'yet'. I suspect you mean they all have a degree of similarity due to their red colouring. The wording after 'yet' needs to be tidier, in my view.
 
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