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ShadowZero007
This was previously posted in the short stories section but I think it goes better here
Below the line is just a copy of the old subject
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Me and my friends decided to try to make flash movies. Were having trouble with flash itself but I think our script is pretty good. Like most flashes its a comedy. Anyway heres the first draft of Script one. Tell me what you think (If anybody out there knows how to use flash help on it would be appreciated)
Episode 1: Window to a new friend
Confucius
Episode#1: Window to a new friend
*All words in between these symbols means actions*
[All words within these symbols means tone of voice]
{All words between these symbols means demeanor}
<All words within these symbols means the location> =All words within these symbols means descriptions of the location=
*screen appears that says*
The Writers
<In Side a house>
Allen: *drinking soda* damn I’m out of soda
INTRO PLAYS
Nick: *throwing rocks aimlessly*
Allen: *Drinking Soda*
*The sound of glass breaking plays*
Matt: [Dramatic] OUR WINDOW HAS BROKE *hit’s the soda out of Allen’s hand* [Angry] Clean that up
Allen: *glares at matt*
Alex: *walks in* We were out of toilet paper so I used one of your movie scripts Matt
Matt: [Shocked] NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO *faints*
Adrian: [Annoyed] *on the computer* Guys me and my GF are having a romantic evening
Allen: *out of nowhere another soda appears in his hand* YES *gives a thumps up to the sky*
*Scene switches to Heaven*
God: *gives Allen a thumbs up*
Alex: but its 1:00 P.M
Adrian: not where she lives
Nick: Someone moved into the abandoned house
Allen: nah your just high
Matt: gets up no he’s right *peaks out the window*
Allen: Oh wanna go say hi?
Matt: nah maybe later
*Screen Appears saying 5 months later appears*
Allen: now
Matt: Yeah lets go
Alex: [EXCITED] IT HAS HAPPNED AT LAST!!!!!!!!!!!! I HAVE MANAGED TO FIX OUR TOILET!!! NO MORE POOPING IN THE HALLWAY FOR US!!!!!!
Matt: come on lets go we are going to say hi to the neighbors house
Nick: *faints spontaneously*
Alex: its its okay I’ll drag him…..
Allen: lets go
<outside the house>
= A mansion is behind them the rest of the neighborhood is nothing but normal houses the house in front of them is very run down=
Allen: [ scared] Oh no
=a girl is walking towards them=
????: Hi!!! Wheres my five dollars
Allen: [Angry] Damn bet
<flash back>
=In a bar=
Allen: *points to Hitler* I bet you can’t convince him to kill all but his vision of the perfect race if you win I’ll give you five dollars every time we meet
????: Watch *walks over to Hitler* He slept with your girl *points to a rabbi*
Hitler: *angry screaming in German*
<End Flashback>
<Back outside the house>
Allen: Uhhh Yvonne Godzilla and Rodan are fighting in your back yard
????: I’m not stupid
<????’s back yard>
=Godzilla and rodan are fighting in her back yard=
<Outside the writers house>
Alex: [Confident] watch how its done….Yvonne you cats dead
????: NOOOOOO
Allen, Alex, Matt, Nick, Adrian: *run away*
?????: *standing there* I don’t have a cat
<Outside the rundown house>
Allen: *knocks on the door* Hello
*screen appears that says Confucius*
Confucius: *running with a huge straw basket on his back with lots of pigs in it*
*angry mob running after him*
Lady Leading Mob: GET HIM HE STOLE OUR PIGS
<Mountain>
Confucius: *watching scene from a mountain* hahaha bitches take this
Fake Confucius: *blows up*
Lady Leading Mob: You cant escape your wife Confucius!!!!!
Confucius: HA *wandering through the mountains* huh *hears footsteps and yelling* damn I knew I shouldn’t have placed those cryptic clues of my location everywhere *runs to a cave and blocks the entrance with a large rock* well now what *Confucius freezes*
*A sign appears that says many years nooo many many many many many many many many many many many many MAAAAANYYYYYY years later*
*the cave has become a old run down house*
<Inside a rundown house>
Confucious: *Unfreezes* WHAT THE HELL MY CAVE…has become some kind of wooden lair….. *wandering around his house taking the boards of the door and windows*
*sign appears that says 5 months later*
<Outside Confucius’ house>
=The writers are standing outside=
Confucius: Opens the door who the f**k are you!
Allen: Were your neighbors
Matt: The ones that live there *points to the mansion*
Alex: So what’s your name
Nick: **spaced out*
Adrian: [Angry] *typing on his laptop* SHE WAS CHEATING ON ME!!! I’M CUTTING HER OFF
Confucius: Neighbors you say housewarming part 4 months ago get lots of presents many toasters…many [SERIOUS] NO PUT HAND IN THERE IT FOR TOAST NOT HANDS *shows us burn marks on his hand*
Matt: *sneaks up Confucius with a bat and hits him on the head* [Dramatic] HE WILL HELP US BUY NEW WINDOWS!!!!!!!! *maniacal laughter*
<In the writers Limo>
=Matts driving, Allen sitting in the passanger seat, nick and adrian first back seat, Alex and the unconscious Confucius in the Second backseat=
Confucius: [Surprised, Angry] WHAT THE HELL!!!!!!!!!
Alex: your coming with to get a new window!
*The car stops*
Nick: {not zoned out} [Serious] okay Confucius go get a window from that pile over there
Confucius: But that gate has a sign with a skull on it and 4 dogs guarding the pile
Matt: just go
Confucius: NO
Allen: We’ll get you a new toaster
Confucius: Toaster AYE! *runs into the gate and gets shocked*
Allen: *rolls down car windowand tosses a rocket launcher to confucious* use that
Confucious: *blows up the gate with the rocket launcher grabs one of the windows and begins running from the dogs* HELP HELP SOMEONE PUT BACON IN MY POCKET!!!
Alex: *laughing*
Allen: MATT DRIVE
Matt: *Matt drives the car into Confucious* ……… crap………
Dogs: *start knawing on Confucious’ leg*
Alex: There’s only one way to Fix this…Allen amputate the arm!
Allen: *pulls out a katana and slashes *
*a black screen appears that says 4 hours later*
<In a hospital room>
=Confucious is lying in the hospital bed his legs are wrapped in bandages his left are is wrapped in bandages his stomach is wrapped in bandages he has a cast around his neck and a bruise on his forehead. The writers are standing around him=
Confucius: What happened!?
Alex: Well you were being chased by dogs Matt hit you with the car the dogs started biting your legs Allen cut at your arm
Allen: My sword got stuck in the bone so we had to yank it out
Alex: well then Adrian dropped his laptop on your head, Nick collapsed on you and… well I poked you for an hour….. We ran when we heard the cops coming.
Confucius: where’s my toaster now
Matt: your not getting one
Nick: *spinning in a chair* Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Adrian: [Angry] OH SO NOW SHES BREAKING UP WITH ME *throws his laptop at Confucius*
Allen: but its not all bad we have some good news!
Confucius: You saved money on car insurance by switching to geico?
Allen: Hell no! The window we broke wasn’t ours it was yours!
*Credits Roll*
Below the line is just a copy of the old subject
_____________________________________________________________
Me and my friends decided to try to make flash movies. Were having trouble with flash itself but I think our script is pretty good. Like most flashes its a comedy. Anyway heres the first draft of Script one. Tell me what you think (If anybody out there knows how to use flash help on it would be appreciated)
Episode 1: Window to a new friend
Confucius
Episode#1: Window to a new friend
*All words in between these symbols means actions*
[All words within these symbols means tone of voice]
{All words between these symbols means demeanor}
<All words within these symbols means the location> =All words within these symbols means descriptions of the location=
*screen appears that says*
The Writers
<In Side a house>
Allen: *drinking soda* damn I’m out of soda
INTRO PLAYS
Nick: *throwing rocks aimlessly*
Allen: *Drinking Soda*
*The sound of glass breaking plays*
Matt: [Dramatic] OUR WINDOW HAS BROKE *hit’s the soda out of Allen’s hand* [Angry] Clean that up
Allen: *glares at matt*
Alex: *walks in* We were out of toilet paper so I used one of your movie scripts Matt
Matt: [Shocked] NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO *faints*
Adrian: [Annoyed] *on the computer* Guys me and my GF are having a romantic evening
Allen: *out of nowhere another soda appears in his hand* YES *gives a thumps up to the sky*
*Scene switches to Heaven*
God: *gives Allen a thumbs up*
Alex: but its 1:00 P.M
Adrian: not where she lives
Nick: Someone moved into the abandoned house
Allen: nah your just high
Matt: gets up no he’s right *peaks out the window*
Allen: Oh wanna go say hi?
Matt: nah maybe later
*Screen Appears saying 5 months later appears*
Allen: now
Matt: Yeah lets go
Alex: [EXCITED] IT HAS HAPPNED AT LAST!!!!!!!!!!!! I HAVE MANAGED TO FIX OUR TOILET!!! NO MORE POOPING IN THE HALLWAY FOR US!!!!!!
Matt: come on lets go we are going to say hi to the neighbors house
Nick: *faints spontaneously*
Alex: its its okay I’ll drag him…..
Allen: lets go
<outside the house>
= A mansion is behind them the rest of the neighborhood is nothing but normal houses the house in front of them is very run down=
Allen: [ scared] Oh no
=a girl is walking towards them=
????: Hi!!! Wheres my five dollars
Allen: [Angry] Damn bet
<flash back>
=In a bar=
Allen: *points to Hitler* I bet you can’t convince him to kill all but his vision of the perfect race if you win I’ll give you five dollars every time we meet
????: Watch *walks over to Hitler* He slept with your girl *points to a rabbi*
Hitler: *angry screaming in German*
<End Flashback>
<Back outside the house>
Allen: Uhhh Yvonne Godzilla and Rodan are fighting in your back yard
????: I’m not stupid
<????’s back yard>
=Godzilla and rodan are fighting in her back yard=
<Outside the writers house>
Alex: [Confident] watch how its done….Yvonne you cats dead
????: NOOOOOO
Allen, Alex, Matt, Nick, Adrian: *run away*
?????: *standing there* I don’t have a cat
<Outside the rundown house>
Allen: *knocks on the door* Hello
*screen appears that says Confucius*
Confucius: *running with a huge straw basket on his back with lots of pigs in it*
*angry mob running after him*
Lady Leading Mob: GET HIM HE STOLE OUR PIGS
<Mountain>
Confucius: *watching scene from a mountain* hahaha bitches take this
Fake Confucius: *blows up*
Lady Leading Mob: You cant escape your wife Confucius!!!!!
Confucius: HA *wandering through the mountains* huh *hears footsteps and yelling* damn I knew I shouldn’t have placed those cryptic clues of my location everywhere *runs to a cave and blocks the entrance with a large rock* well now what *Confucius freezes*
*A sign appears that says many years nooo many many many many many many many many many many many many MAAAAANYYYYYY years later*
*the cave has become a old run down house*
<Inside a rundown house>
Confucious: *Unfreezes* WHAT THE HELL MY CAVE…has become some kind of wooden lair….. *wandering around his house taking the boards of the door and windows*
*sign appears that says 5 months later*
<Outside Confucius’ house>
=The writers are standing outside=
Confucius: Opens the door who the f**k are you!
Allen: Were your neighbors
Matt: The ones that live there *points to the mansion*
Alex: So what’s your name
Nick: **spaced out*
Adrian: [Angry] *typing on his laptop* SHE WAS CHEATING ON ME!!! I’M CUTTING HER OFF
Confucius: Neighbors you say housewarming part 4 months ago get lots of presents many toasters…many [SERIOUS] NO PUT HAND IN THERE IT FOR TOAST NOT HANDS *shows us burn marks on his hand*
Matt: *sneaks up Confucius with a bat and hits him on the head* [Dramatic] HE WILL HELP US BUY NEW WINDOWS!!!!!!!! *maniacal laughter*
<In the writers Limo>
=Matts driving, Allen sitting in the passanger seat, nick and adrian first back seat, Alex and the unconscious Confucius in the Second backseat=
Confucius: [Surprised, Angry] WHAT THE HELL!!!!!!!!!
Alex: your coming with to get a new window!
*The car stops*
Nick: {not zoned out} [Serious] okay Confucius go get a window from that pile over there
Confucius: But that gate has a sign with a skull on it and 4 dogs guarding the pile
Matt: just go
Confucius: NO
Allen: We’ll get you a new toaster
Confucius: Toaster AYE! *runs into the gate and gets shocked*
Allen: *rolls down car windowand tosses a rocket launcher to confucious* use that
Confucious: *blows up the gate with the rocket launcher grabs one of the windows and begins running from the dogs* HELP HELP SOMEONE PUT BACON IN MY POCKET!!!
Alex: *laughing*
Allen: MATT DRIVE
Matt: *Matt drives the car into Confucious* ……… crap………
Dogs: *start knawing on Confucious’ leg*
Alex: There’s only one way to Fix this…Allen amputate the arm!
Allen: *pulls out a katana and slashes *
*a black screen appears that says 4 hours later*
<In a hospital room>
=Confucious is lying in the hospital bed his legs are wrapped in bandages his left are is wrapped in bandages his stomach is wrapped in bandages he has a cast around his neck and a bruise on his forehead. The writers are standing around him=
Confucius: What happened!?
Alex: Well you were being chased by dogs Matt hit you with the car the dogs started biting your legs Allen cut at your arm
Allen: My sword got stuck in the bone so we had to yank it out
Alex: well then Adrian dropped his laptop on your head, Nick collapsed on you and… well I poked you for an hour….. We ran when we heard the cops coming.
Confucius: where’s my toaster now
Matt: your not getting one
Nick: *spinning in a chair* Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Adrian: [Angry] OH SO NOW SHES BREAKING UP WITH ME *throws his laptop at Confucius*
Allen: but its not all bad we have some good news!
Confucius: You saved money on car insurance by switching to geico?
Allen: Hell no! The window we broke wasn’t ours it was yours!
*Credits Roll*