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Confucius (1 Viewer)

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ShadowZero007

This was previously posted in the short stories section but I think it goes better here

Below the line is just a copy of the old subject
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Me and my friends decided to try to make flash movies. Were having trouble with flash itself but I think our script is pretty good. Like most flashes its a comedy. Anyway heres the first draft of Script one. Tell me what you think (If anybody out there knows how to use flash help on it would be appreciated)



Episode 1: Window to a new friend

Confucius


Episode#1: Window to a new friend




*All words in between these symbols means actions*
[All words within these symbols means tone of voice]
{All words between these symbols means demeanor}
<All words within these symbols means the location> =All words within these symbols means descriptions of the location=


*screen appears that says*

The Writers

<In Side a house>



Allen: *drinking soda* damn I’m out of soda


INTRO PLAYS


Nick: *throwing rocks aimlessly*

Allen: *Drinking Soda*

*The sound of glass breaking plays*

Matt: [Dramatic] OUR WINDOW HAS BROKE *hit’s the soda out of Allen’s hand* [Angry] Clean that up

Allen: *glares at matt*

Alex: *walks in* We were out of toilet paper so I used one of your movie scripts Matt

Matt: [Shocked] NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO *faints*

Adrian: [Annoyed] *on the computer* Guys me and my GF are having a romantic evening

Allen: *out of nowhere another soda appears in his hand* YES *gives a thumps up to the sky*

*Scene switches to Heaven*

God: *gives Allen a thumbs up*

Alex: but its 1:00 P.M

Adrian: not where she lives

Nick: Someone moved into the abandoned house

Allen: nah your just high

Matt: gets up no he’s right *peaks out the window*

Allen: Oh wanna go say hi?

Matt: nah maybe later


*Screen Appears saying 5 months later appears*

Allen: now

Matt: Yeah lets go

Alex: [EXCITED] IT HAS HAPPNED AT LAST!!!!!!!!!!!! I HAVE MANAGED TO FIX OUR TOILET!!! NO MORE POOPING IN THE HALLWAY FOR US!!!!!!

Matt: come on lets go we are going to say hi to the neighbors house

Nick: *faints spontaneously*

Alex: its its okay I’ll drag him…..

Allen: lets go

<outside the house>

= A mansion is behind them the rest of the neighborhood is nothing but normal houses the house in front of them is very run down=

Allen: [ scared] Oh no

=a girl is walking towards them=

????: Hi!!! Wheres my five dollars

Allen: [Angry] Damn bet

<flash back>

=In a bar=

Allen: *points to Hitler* I bet you can’t convince him to kill all but his vision of the perfect race if you win I’ll give you five dollars every time we meet

????: Watch *walks over to Hitler* He slept with your girl *points to a rabbi*

Hitler: *angry screaming in German*

<End Flashback>

<Back outside the house>

Allen: Uhhh Yvonne Godzilla and Rodan are fighting in your back yard

????: I’m not stupid

<????’s back yard>

=Godzilla and rodan are fighting in her back yard=

<Outside the writers house>

Alex: [Confident] watch how its done….Yvonne you cats dead

????: NOOOOOO

Allen, Alex, Matt, Nick, Adrian: *run away*

?????: *standing there* I don’t have a cat

<Outside the rundown house>

Allen: *knocks on the door* Hello

*screen appears that says Confucius*

Confucius: *running with a huge straw basket on his back with lots of pigs in it*

*angry mob running after him*

Lady Leading Mob: GET HIM HE STOLE OUR PIGS

<Mountain>

Confucius: *watching scene from a mountain* hahaha bitches take this

Fake Confucius: *blows up*

Lady Leading Mob: You cant escape your wife Confucius!!!!!

Confucius: HA *wandering through the mountains* huh *hears footsteps and yelling* damn I knew I shouldn’t have placed those cryptic clues of my location everywhere *runs to a cave and blocks the entrance with a large rock* well now what *Confucius freezes*

*A sign appears that says many years nooo many many many many many many many many many many many many MAAAAANYYYYYY years later*

*the cave has become a old run down house*

<Inside a rundown house>

Confucious: *Unfreezes* WHAT THE HELL MY CAVE…has become some kind of wooden lair….. *wandering around his house taking the boards of the door and windows*

*sign appears that says 5 months later*

<Outside Confucius’ house>

=The writers are standing outside=

Confucius: Opens the door who the f**k are you!

Allen: Were your neighbors

Matt: The ones that live there *points to the mansion*

Alex: So what’s your name

Nick: **spaced out*

Adrian: [Angry] *typing on his laptop* SHE WAS CHEATING ON ME!!! I’M CUTTING HER OFF

Confucius: Neighbors you say housewarming part 4 months ago get lots of presents many toasters…many [SERIOUS] NO PUT HAND IN THERE IT FOR TOAST NOT HANDS *shows us burn marks on his hand*

Matt: *sneaks up Confucius with a bat and hits him on the head* [Dramatic] HE WILL HELP US BUY NEW WINDOWS!!!!!!!! *maniacal laughter*

<In the writers Limo>

=Matts driving, Allen sitting in the passanger seat, nick and adrian first back seat, Alex and the unconscious Confucius in the Second backseat=

Confucius: [Surprised, Angry] WHAT THE HELL!!!!!!!!!

Alex: your coming with to get a new window!

*The car stops*

Nick: {not zoned out} [Serious] okay Confucius go get a window from that pile over there

Confucius: But that gate has a sign with a skull on it and 4 dogs guarding the pile

Matt: just go

Confucius: NO

Allen: We’ll get you a new toaster

Confucius: Toaster AYE! *runs into the gate and gets shocked*

Allen: *rolls down car windowand tosses a rocket launcher to confucious* use that

Confucious: *blows up the gate with the rocket launcher grabs one of the windows and begins running from the dogs* HELP HELP SOMEONE PUT BACON IN MY POCKET!!!

Alex: *laughing*

Allen: MATT DRIVE

Matt: *Matt drives the car into Confucious* ……… crap………

Dogs: *start knawing on Confucious’ leg*
Alex: There’s only one way to Fix this…Allen amputate the arm!

Allen: *pulls out a katana and slashes *

*a black screen appears that says 4 hours later*

<In a hospital room>

=Confucious is lying in the hospital bed his legs are wrapped in bandages his left are is wrapped in bandages his stomach is wrapped in bandages he has a cast around his neck and a bruise on his forehead. The writers are standing around him=

Confucius: What happened!?

Alex: Well you were being chased by dogs Matt hit you with the car the dogs started biting your legs Allen cut at your arm

Allen: My sword got stuck in the bone so we had to yank it out

Alex: well then Adrian dropped his laptop on your head, Nick collapsed on you and… well I poked you for an hour….. We ran when we heard the cops coming.

Confucius: where’s my toaster now

Matt: your not getting one

Nick: *spinning in a chair* Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Adrian: [Angry] OH SO NOW SHES BREAKING UP WITH ME *throws his laptop at Confucius*

Allen: but its not all bad we have some good news!

Confucius: You saved money on car insurance by switching to geico?

Allen: Hell no! The window we broke wasn’t ours it was yours!

*Credits Roll*
 

Whende

Senior Member
It was hillarious. My favorite part was the toaster part:
"No put hand in there it for toast not hands" it made me think of a caveman.
 
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