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Awakening (1 Viewer)

Bansi

Senior Member
A hundred thoughts,
And wild imagination

Gathered in a state,
To converge with infinite

Meeting endless possibilities..
Created in a state of mind

To see things as they could be,
Rather than what they are..

Takes you to a
Wonderland
Never to come back

Thinking it will last
Forever,
Realizing its just land of
Illusion

Not meaning the dark side
It Might make you feel right

Go with the flow,
To explore some more

Look forward to things
That aligns you
With your holly spirits,

In a place so sacred
You find that divine,

And turn your Darkness
Into the light that is not fragile..!
-Bansi

2.

- The land of illusions

People do ask
Is Land of illusion
an escape from reality?
And i say-
It Takes you places,
That u never imagined
And Makes you feel
Like home..
Not to stay where you are,
But to move on-
With a hundred things..
Imagine all the goods,
And ride in the boat of faith
Wander in the areas,
Still unexplored..
Sink into your Imagination,
See past expectations,
And attain the state of mind
Which will unwind
The spirits of holy kind..
 
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jenthepen

Staff member
Mentor
[h=2]Awakening[/h]
A hundred thoughts ,
And wild imagination

Gathered in a state,
To converge with infinite

Meeting endless possibilities..
Created in a state of mind

To see things as they could be,
Rather than what they are

Takes you to a
Wonderland
Never to come back

Thinking it will last
Forever,
Realizing it's just land of
Illusion

Not meaning the dark side
It Might make you feel right

Go with the flow,
To explore some more

Look forward to things
That aligns you
With your holly spirits,

In a place so sacred
You find that divine,

And turn your Darkness
Into the light that is not fragile..!
-Bansi


A good expression of the feelings that come with those moments of enlightenment on the road to understanding. The last line is especially interesting, capturing, as it does, the sense of connection with something more permanent than material life.

I have marked a few ommissions in red. Take care to edit carefully to make your poems as perfect as you can. It's easy to write things in such a rush of enthusiasm that details are missed. It's always worth going back and reading the work through slowly to catch any mistakes.
 

Bansi

Senior Member
Thank you for your remarks dear. I will surely be extra careful with the grammer mistakes..
And yes you are getting the same emotions as when i wtote it. Something more than material world. More of a spiritual journey..

There is another one i wrote when writing this one. I have posted the 2nd one as well.. please give your feedback on that too..
 
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