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All these things, good memories, painful issues. So well captured in this poem.
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Alana, what a beautiful poem. So full of emotion. That last line is great by the way, in all its imagery. It carries the entire poem.
I agree with Darren, this poem is heartbreaking to me, after losing my mom, I searched for scraps of her, reread her cards, looked at old photos, thought I saw the back of her head in a crowd of strangers... You expressed the loss and the feeling of struggling through the loss... well done...
There are pieces, everywhere:
and tiny niggling pieces
that worry like a pebble in a shoe.
My favorite line... when we lose someone, we lose a piece of our self... but the pain lingers... I was wondering, would "linger" work better than "lingering".... maybe...
I agree with Darren, this is eloquent, with elegant imagery, a beautiful observation...
That's a beautiful observation. I can see it.
I like how you shaped your poem, two short lines, two long, two short in each stanza.
It's a beautiful poem, not only hinting at winter in nature, but also at growing old.
I adore the way you use imagery in your poetry. Many of your poems are beautiful and delicate puzzles to be lingered over and I find myself coming back to read them again and again.