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A Short Dialogue. (1 Viewer)


Friends Talking

k: All State Choir.
S: Tell me about it.
k: Try outs.
k: I was the underdog.
k: Nervous
k: But confident.
k: I make first chair.
k: I'm like "yeah".
k: Hearings.
k: I meet these two dudes from cab cal.
k: They were kinda cool.
k: Hearing is easy.
k: The real deal starts thursday.
k: I go.
k: And I just stand there
k: All weekend.
k: The entire time we are in the social scene I just stand there.
k: I'm a ghost.
k: Noone talks to me and there arent any opportunities to talk to them.
k: I'm the only one from Delmarva Christian.
k: We sing.
k: I haven't sung that poorly in a while.
k: I had no confidence in myself.
s: Emo shit.
k: *ignoring* Sit next to Indian dude.
k: Looks like one of the dudes on the sunglass ads.
k: At the beach, in black and white
k: With the insignificant but hot chick.
k: Next to him is Joe.
k: Joe and India talk about everything in the choir.
k: I feel them talking about me.
k: But don't hear it.
k: I just feel it.
k: They don't know I'm first chair.
k: we go to the gym for break.
k: Two stoners meet up.
s: At all state chorus. *laughs*.
k: And the two discuss obscure illegal drugs they and their friends smoke.
k: We go back to sing.
k: I stand alone.
k: It's a microcosm.
s: A microcosm of what?
k: Youth society.
k: The people are chill, but always rethinking stuff.
k: Always on their toes.
k: Always thinking what the next guy will do.
k: I see beautiful girls.
s: Beautiful
s: Not hot?
s: But beautiful.
k: Some beautiful.
k: More hot.
k: But a few...are beautiful.
k: They all look at each other.
k: I talk to one
k: She talks to me rather
k: Her name is kelly
k: She is gorgeous
s: Kelly.
k: A singer.
k: An actress.
s: Hair color?
k: Blonde.
s: Okay.
k: Lips like Fallon. Maybe bigger.
s: Mmm.
k: Says her family is Catholic.
k: But she's Buddhist.
s: *laughing*
k: Wearing a long green shirt and tan boots.
k: with medallion belt
k: cute attempt at legend of zelda
k: She sees I'm not interesting and goes back to the other people.
k: Friday was a carbon copy.
k: It was like dying.
k: But...
k: The director was amazing.
k: Really could work the choir.
k: Saturday we had the concert.
s: A buddhist...*laughs*
s: Go on.
k: My parents came.
k: they left right after the show
k: Lauren Henry left a note on my windshield wiper.
k: "good job"
k: I went to Arby's and bought a sandwhich.
k: And then sat there at the window and ate it.
*short silence*
k: Today I masturbated twice.
k: I don't know what to make of life .
k: It's not emo.
s: No...
s: It isn't.
s: It's...
s: Profound
k: *questioning glance*
s: But why?
k: Why what?
s: The reverie. Why now? Why all-state choir? Our school. It's like that every day.
k: What do you want me to do?
s: *shrug*
k: I talked to Rachel.
k: Thursday and Friday nights
k: To catch up.
k: but we talked for like an hour and half each time
k: She...
s: yeah?
k: is a very nice girl
s: yeah
s: I guess thats what we want.
s: A nice girl.
k: Yes. I want to get a nice girl and just be happy. That's what I wanna do.
s: I don't really want to be happy, if that's all there is. You know?
k: No, I don't.
s: Me neither.
k: I guess we're on the same page then.
Is this for a play? Because judging by the way you've layed it out it seems like it. And why have you started a new line when there isn't a new character speaking?

Welcome to the forums by the way.


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What is the dialogue about? The "k" and "s" is very distracting because we don't even know who they are. It's very disjointed. You need to tighten it more. A lot more ...