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    The Date





    EXT. OUTSIDE OF PARTY HOUSE-NIGHT

    DARREN and JASON exit a cab, directly in front of a home bustling with activity, lights flashing and music blaring as the party is fully underway. DARREN and JASON begin walking towards the house.


    DARREN


    Man, I dont know how I let you drag me
    into this.


    JASON

    Come on Darren, this party is gonna be
    off the CHAIN! The chick whos throwin
    it, I heard she invited all her friends
    from some sex club shes in, you know
    what that means?


    DARREN

    Im afraid to ask.


    JASON

    FREE ASS!!!


    DARREN

    Oookaay but Im not looking for free
    ass. I just want to find a nice woman who
    I can actually have a conversation with.
    Is that too much to ask?


    JASON

    Look man, I know you been burned and
    shit. And I know the last few dates
    youve been on were pretty fucked up

    DARRENS eyes roll to the back of his head and he starts to turn around, but JASON grabs him, placing both hands on his shoulders. (beat)



    JASON

    Dont worry about that tonight. Were
    here, theres a party, just enjoy
    yourself man. Whats the worst that could
    happen?

    FADE OUT:


    FADE IN:

    INT. PARTY HOUSE-NIGHT

    DARRENS eyes move back and forth nervously. He is wary of the people seated around him, nearly out of control drunk, same as most of the people at the whole damn party, all of them dancing to the song ALLIGATOR WOMAN by Cameo. Knew he shouldnt have trusted JASON.

    DARREN tries to get off the couch, but a steady stream of people recklessly dancing in front of him make it impossible.

    JASON is one of the drunkest of all. He has a necktie tied around his head. JASON dances wildly, stumbling towards the couch.



    JASON

    Dude, you gonna ass kiss the couch all
    night or what? Come on man, look at all
    these women!!WHOOOAHHH! PARTY TIME!

    JASON stumbles, about to walk away before DARREN (still seated) grabs him by the arm.



    DARREN

    Jason! Jason! Look, this isnt me man, I
    think its time for me to go.


    JASON

    Come on man! We just got here!


    DARREN

    Jason, weve been here for two hours!

    JASON stares at DARREN with a puzzled look, tugging on the tie(beat).


    JASON

    Reallythen I know your ass must hurt
    cause that couch dont look too
    comfortable!WHOOOAH!PARTYY!!

    DARREN slides back into the couch, an embarrassed and weary look on his face. Out of the corner of his eye he sees a girl seated on the couch who wasnt there before. She shyly looks at him, slightly smiling.


    GIRL

    Your uhyour friend , hes really
    enjoying himself?


    DARREN

    Uh yeah, he he loves his liquor



    GIRL

    I noticed you dont have a cup


    DARREN

    Naw, not me. I dont drink. Well, I do,
    but uhI think everybody heres drunk
    enough for me


    DARREN is distracted as he turns his head and looks at JASON, dancing wildly with some female. JASON looks over at DARREN, who upon seeing him sitting and talking with a woman begins smiling widely, nodding his head up and down and poking his finger through an imaginary hole.

    DARREN, a startled look on his face, quickly turns around, only to be startled again, as he joins GIRL in forming a wide-eyed, open mouthed, stunned expression. They are both staring at a hefty guy dancing in front of the couch beginning to remove his clothing. They both look at each other and just so happen to say the same thing.



    DARREN/GIRL

    You want to get out of here?

    FADE OUT:







    FADE IN:

    INT. CARNIGHT


    GIRL drives along, DARREN seated next to her. They are both smiling, while having a casual conversation.


    DARREN

    Im sorry, II didnt even get your name?


    GIRL

    JASMINE. And you are


    DARREN

    Darren.


    JASMINE

    Darren,(beat) thats nice. Its okay, I
    mean it was pretty chaotic back there.


    DARREN

    Yeah.


    JASMINE

    I dont even know why I came. I knew I
    shouldnt have let Lizzy talk me into it.


    DARREN

    Hey, you never know? Its not that late,
    the nights still young. Something good
    can still come of it. I mean, we met.


    JASMINE

    Thats true. You do seem pretty
    different.(smiling)

    DARREN begins to smile(beat). Suddenly, DARREN begins sniffing, looking a little worried.


    JASMINE

    Youre right. The night is still young,
    if you dont want me to take you straight
    home, I know this twenty-four hour diner
    thats got the best cheese-steak.


    DARREN is still sniffing. He is smiling but beginning to look uncomfortable.


    DARREN

    Hey thatthats great. If youre up for
    it, Id love it. So how umm (looking
    around) how do you know Lizzy?


    JASMINE

    Were both members of this therapy group.
    But Im thinking about leaving it. I
    dont know, it just seems like a big
    waste of time.


    DARREN

    Oh really? (beat)

    DARREN pleasantly smiles, as JASONS sex group remark replays itself in his head.


    DARREN

    Why are you thinking about leaving?


    JASMINE

    Oh yknow, typical Freudian psycho babble
    bullshit. To me, it seems like most
    shrinks just like to hear themselves
    talk. Its like they try and make your
    problems seem like theyre worse than
    they are.


    DARREN

    So true, so true. I mean, Ive only known
    you for a short time, but you dont seem
    like you need help to me.


    JASMINE

    (Huge smile comes across her face) Thank
    you! Thats so sweet. I knew you were
    different. I could just tell.

    Suddenly a somewhat slightly offended look forms across DARRENS face, as he begins sniffing and looking around, all the while still trying to maintain the spirit of the conversation, even laughing slightly.



    DARREN

    Did you uhrun over a dead dog or
    something?


    JASMINE

    Sorry (smiling). My bad. Whenever I get
    happyI get likeuncontrollable
    flatulence. But its not that bad. Ive
    dealt with it since growing up. My mom
    taught me that I shouldnt be ashamed of
    a natural body function, and everybody
    does it. I just do it in spades. (begins
    laughing) OOOP! Scuse me.


    DARREN sits silently, a look of horror on his face. Suddenly, JASMINES cell phone rings.


    JASMINE

    Who could thisoh, its Lizzy. Whats up? Girl,
    Im sorry but it was time for me to go! I
    did not want to catch the flabby patty
    peep show! (beat) He did what?(breaks
    into laughter)

    DARREN has a very uncomfortable smile on his face as he tries to discreetly place his hand over his mouth and cover his nose.


    JASMINE

    You lying? In the punch bowl! Oh my God! (laughter)

    DARREN begins gagging a little. He tries to hold it back discreetly, still holding one hand over his mouth, using the other to try and franticly wave his hand in front of his nose, his head is turned towards the window.


    JASMINE

    Are you serious? Oh my God, we should
    have stayed! (laughing hysterically)

    DARREN begins wiping his eyes, which are watering.


    JASMINE

    I KNOW, I know. But it just wasnt my
    scene. And I met this guy DARREN who
    needed a ride home. (JASMINE looks at
    DARREN, who hurriedly turns in her
    direction, forcing a smile upon his
    face.)

    JASMINE

    Okay. See you tomorrow. (ends phone-call,
    looks over at DARREN) Are you okay?


    DARREN

    Yeahyeah Im fine. Well, actually Im
    Im a little tired, and uhm I got work
    tomorrow too.You mind if I call it a
    night?


    JASMINE

    Oh, okay. Thats fine. Actually, I gotta
    get up pretty early tomorrow too. So umm
    you mind if I get your number? Or better
    yet, let me give you mine, cause I always
    have a pretty funky schedule, yknow?


    DARREN

    Oh I believe you! I mean, thats fine

    DARREN turns back around, mumbling (thank you god *3, while JASMINE fumbles through her purse)


    JASMINE (O.S)

    Hope you dont mind if I smoke?

    DARREN slowly turns around and his eyes begin to widen as he sees JASMINE holding a lighter in her hand.


    DARREN

    (Moving in slow motion) NOOOOOOOO!!!!!
    (reaching to try and grab the lighter.

    FADE OUT:






    FADE IN:

    INT. JASONS APARTMENTNIGHT



    JASON
    Im coming, Im coming. ( JASON walks
    to answer door, holding his head from
    hangover)


    EXT. OUTSIDE JASONS APARTMENT DOORNIGHT


    (Door opens)

    DARREN punches JASON in the face, turns around and slowly walks down hallway, smoke coming from his person. JASON is lying on floor, holding his nose.


    JASON
    Dudewhat was that for? (begins
    sniffing) What the hell is that
    smell!?




    FADE OUT:












    The End
    "I beg to dream and differ from the hollow lies...."

  2. #2
    Hahaha, that has hilarious!!!! Sort of disgrusting, though.

  3. #3
    Thanks, I appreciate the comments.
    "I beg to dream and differ from the hollow lies...."

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    i enjoyed it too! it was cute humor.

  5. #5
    Thanks faeriedanzer, I'm glad you liked it.
    "I beg to dream and differ from the hollow lies...."

  6. #6
    Not a movie I would watch.

    It's got kind of an "American Pie" thing going on. The dialogue is timed well and believable for that type of movie.

    I didn't really find it funny, but I am not really a fan of those frat boy type movies. :shrug:

  7. #7
    Thanks for the comments Ernieweaselfat, they're appreciated.
    "I beg to dream and differ from the hollow lies...."

  8. #8
    Well, if you are going to write, there is no point writing stuff practically to the exact letter. This was predictable. I knew exactly what would happen, and even when I read on, hoping to be surprised with a twist, there wasn't one. It's executed well enough for what it is, but it follows the line too closely.

    Sorry if I sounded harsh, it's pathetically predictable.
    To write is human, to edit is divine.

  9. #9
    Thanks for your opinion FOY, it's appreciated.
    "I beg to dream and differ from the hollow lies...."

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