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    I agree that you don't need too many diffent "said" variants. Sometimes I find them necessary, but usually it's only the usage of words like shouted or whispered.
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    Quote Originally Posted by suzakugaiden
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    Shouted and whispered are usually valid, because it's either a bit silly to show them, or there's no other real way to convey volume. Saying stuff liked "shouted loudly" is a bit retarded the because it's redundant so DON'T DO IT.

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    "-Ly" words are the Devil, anyway.
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    Quote Originally Posted by blademasterzzz
    The door quickly opened, and a small man strolled inside the room.

    "Hi." He announced casually, treading from side to side.
    "Hello." Homer remarked, looking up from his glass.
    "Well," The man continued shyly. "I was sorta looking for this bar with the.. eh..."
    "Special services?" Homer guessed, leaning back on his chair.
    "Yea." The man conceded, looking more uncomfortable than ever.
    "Right through here, my friend." Homer stood up, pulling back a curtain.

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    The door quickly opened, and a small man strolled inside the room.

    "Hi." He said, treading from side to side.
    "Hello." Homer said, looking up from his glass.
    "Well," The man continued. "I was sorta looking for this bar with the.. eh..."
    "Special services?" Homer said, leaning back on his chair.
    "Yea." The man said, looking more uncomfortable than ever.
    "Right through here, my friend." Homer stood up, pulling back a curtain.
    The door opened, and a small man walked into the room.

    "Hi."

    "Hello," Homer said, looking up from his glass.

    "Well...I was sorta looking for this bar with the.. eh..."

    Homer leaned back on his chair and grinned. "Special services?"

    "Yea." The man looked more uncomfortable than ever.

    "Right through here, my friend." Homer stood up and pulled back a curtain.

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    OK, it's not perfect, but I did get rid of a few more of the "said"'s.

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    One more Tom Swiftly

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    I never knew there were so many ways to say "said."
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  9. #29
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    DO NOT use any of these words. Unless your work is otherwise absolute genius, your manuscript will be sent sailing out the first available window of any reputable editor's office.

    And even when you use said, use it sparingly. And use it for the following two reasons: a) indentification; and b) rhythm, which plays a large part in writing dialogue.

    For example, in the following passage, the first said is used for indentification, the second used for rhythm:

    "Anyway,” Brody said, “for the time being, you've got a Jane Doe on your hands and I've got one big fat question mark."

    “If she's suffering from any real psychosis, it could be weeks or even months before she opens up.”

    "That's not what I want to hear, Doc."

    "I'm not a miracle worker," Tolan said. "Far from it."

    "Maybe not. But you're the closest thing I've got."

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    Quote Originally Posted by Julianne
    "Yea." The man looked more uncomfortable than ever.
    P.S. The word "Yea" is an exclamation of joy or happiness. The word "yeah" is slang for "yes."

    I only bring this up because I see people doing this all the time and it absolutely drives me nuts.

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