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Annie. Marie

Senior Member
And if I grant this gift to you
will you know what to do with it?
Will you expect it again?

And if I grant this gift to you
will you misplace it?
Will you ask for another instead?

And is this gift
even a gift
if I’m not giving anything
but simply
just letting go?
 

2020Syd2020

Senior Member
Hello,

I think what I like about the work you’ve shared with us so far is how you utilise something so sparse, but are still able to tell a lot by what can be read between the lines. I think there is a tendency to over narrate which you don’t seem to fall into. If I had to make any sort of criticism I think in terms of structure I would like S3 to follow the same pattern as S1 & S2.

Cheers

Syd
 

Annie. Marie

Senior Member
Hello,

I think what I like about the work you’ve shared with us so far is how you utilise something so sparse, but are still able to tell a lot by what can be read between the lines. I think there is a tendency to over narrate which you don’t seem to fall into. If I had to make any sort of criticism I think in terms of structure I would like S3 to follow the same pattern as S1 & S2.

Cheers

Syd


Thank you so much! I work very hard at not over explaining. I'm glad it's noticed. Thank you for the feedback as well.
 
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