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  1. March 5th, 2021, 04:16 PM #1
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    Tyrian Purple

    Tyrian Purple

    Tyrian purple
    the embodiment
    of privilege, worth

    and drama

    the reek of fish

    overwrought
    overwhelming
    overthought
    overpriced...

    a variegation of history
    so the books say

    in retrospect

    I look...

    to cotton
    to indigo

    simple
    honest
    abundant

    deep and rich
    enduring

    without the stench
    of decayed life
    Last edited by Darkkin; March 6th, 2021 at 12:00 AM.

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  2. March 5th, 2021, 08:09 PM #2
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    Liked this; just a thought - need the last three lines? To me they seem to explain the poem. Keep up the good work.
    "Put not your trust not in princes, in the children of men,
    in whom there is no salvation."
    Psalm 146

    Timely, isn't it?
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  3. March 6th, 2021, 12:05 AM #3
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    I didn't have the last three lines in the original version, they were a first draft edit that I was on the fence about. Do they work, yes, but does it defeat the purpose of the allegory, yes. I took them off again. Thank you for the read and insight.

    - D.

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