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  1. #1

    You just dare to judge her

    Cobwebs creeping over walls,
    Stains over bedsheets,
    Food a little burnt always,
    Not a prompt response for calls incoming,
    A calm, composed, smiling mother of a special kid,
    who knows, what she wants from herself

    Ritu Dimri Nautiyal
    Last edited by ritudimrinautiyal; January 23rd, 2021 at 03:28 AM.

  2. #2
    Quote Originally Posted by ritudimrinautiyal View Post
    Cobwebs creeping over walls,
    Stains over bedsheets,
    Food a little burnt always,
    Not a prompt response for calls incoming,
    A calm, composed, smiling mother of a special kid,
    on her way of preferences

    Ritu Dimri Nautiyal
    Hello,

    Lovely words by the way.
    She is like an offset clock that would be damn rude if anyone tried to fix her, she wasn’t always this way, most definitely not her choice.

    Hope you don’t mind my comment.
    Thank you.

    J.

  3. #3
    Quote Originally Posted by Jk_Sl View Post
    Hello,

    Lovely words by the way.
    She is like an offset clock that would be damn rude if anyone tried to fix her, she wasn’t always this way, most definitely not her choice.

    Hope you don’t mind my comment.
    Thank you.

    J.
    Not definitely her choice, but clear about what she has chosen.
    Felt glad that you liked it.
    Thanks
    Ritu

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    You just dare to judge her

    Quote Originally Posted by ritudimrinautiyal View Post
    Not definitely her choice, but clear about what she has chosen.
    Felt glad that you liked it.
    Thanks
    Ritu
    I see she turned into a far stronger woman for it all ,
    You’re welcome and thank you.

    J.

  5. #5
    Quote Originally Posted by Jk_Sl View Post
    I see she turned into a far stronger woman for it all ,
    You’re welcome and thank you.

    J.
    She has.
    Thanks again

  6. #6
    Quote Originally Posted by ritudimrinautiyal View Post
    She has.
    Thanks again
    My pleasure.

    J.

  7. #7
    This is interesting, a little different from your other work, but still it has that voice which I associate with stuff I’ve read from you. I like that the overall meaning still seems a little oblique to me because that gives me a reason to come back and read the piece again.

    If I had one criticism I feel like the last line is a little passive, for me in these shorter piece I want more of a punch at the end. But that’s just me.

    Cheers

    Syd

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    Quote Originally Posted by 2020Syd2020 View Post
    This is interesting, a little different from your other work, but still it has that voice which I associate with stuff I’ve read from you. I like that the overall meaning still seems a little oblique to me because that gives me a reason to come back and read the piece again.

    If I had one criticism I feel like the last line is a little passive, for me in these shorter piece I want more of a punch at the end. But that’s just me.

    Cheers

    Syd
    Ok Syd. I will rethink on the ending.
    Thanks
    Ritu

  9. #9
    Yeah, don't judge because you just cannot know...
    Agreed: lovely words, lovely poem
    NO!

  10. #10
    Quote Originally Posted by happy-hippie View Post
    Yeah, don't judge because you just cannot know...
    Agreed: lovely words, lovely poem
    Thanks Happy

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