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  1. January 17th, 2021, 06:17 PM #1
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    Acid Rain

    EDIT: This poem isn't about THIS forum. I know I wrote it below but there seems to be some confusion!!!!!

    Written a long time ago for another forum ...

    Acid Rain

    Mellifluous, a smooth and even tone
    Overt oppression jars this slickened tongue
    Derelict the thoughts of addled men,
    Sat pompous on a thrown of young.

    Angst, the cold of a blacksmith’s steel,
    Ready the anvil, hammer and fire.
    Eschew the water, shape, not starve the blade,
    Forgo the calamity of lustful ire.

    Open hearts, the once was withered part
    Or risk a turgid land of clod and weed
    Lament the arid earth, breathe in the trees
    Superfluous the acid rain so praise our seed.
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  2. January 18th, 2021, 05:42 AM #2
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    Hmmm... I took some time to really think about this...

    my interpretation:

    Not speaking to or not disciplining the youth in a thoughtful or balanced way can produce environmental hazards. They don't need to be raged at; they need healthy rain.

    My favorite line is "Eschew the water, shape, not starve the blade"

    Not sure if I understood properly but I appreciate how it flows...real easy, no hiccups.
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  3. January 18th, 2021, 05:45 AM #3
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    Quote Originally Posted by happy-hippie View Post
    Hmmm... I took some time to really think about this...

    my interpretation:

    Not speaking to or not disciplining the youth in a thoughtful or balanced way can produce environmental hazards. They don't need to be raged at; they need healthy rain.

    My favorite line is "Eschew the water, shape, not starve the blade"

    Not sure if I understood properly but I appreciate how it flows...real easy, no hiccups.
    It's about bad modding on a forum. look down the first letters of the stanzas ...
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  4. January 18th, 2021, 05:51 AM #4
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    I totally missed that...I was reading things into your poem.
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  5. January 18th, 2021, 08:54 AM #5
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    This fool (me) suggests 'throne' for thrown in line 4.

    Quote Originally Posted by TheMightyAz View Post
    It's about bad modding on a forum. look down the first letters of the stanzas ...
    This poetry form is known as acrostic.
    Last edited by Phil Istine; January 18th, 2021 at 01:40 PM.

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  6. January 18th, 2021, 04:35 PM #6
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    Quote Originally Posted by Phil Istine View Post
    This fool (me) suggests 'throne' for thrown in line 4.



    This poetry form is known as acrostic.
    Yes, I'm aware of that. This isn't related to this site by the way, just in case there's any more confusion on my PMs!!! This site is great.
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