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    Literary Maneuvers January 2021: Gunshots in the Hills

    Literary Maneuvers Competition
    for January 2021

    "Gunshots in the Hills"

    Word limit: 650
    Begins Friday, January 1
    Closes Friday, January 15
    2359hrs GMT
    Critiques from judges due to rcallaci via PM
    (please and thank you)
    by Saturday, January 30


    This month you will be prompted:

    Gunshots in the Hills

    Pick your own title, write about whatever you want, as long as it fits the prompt.

    If you win, you'll get a badge pinned to your profile, plus the chance to write
    for our yearly Grand Fiction Challenge which carries cash prizes. Pretty neat, eh?

    The Awesome and Magnificent
    January 2021 Judges

    Thank you all!

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    Last edited by rcallaci; December 31st, 2020 at 06:52 PM.
    Nature weeps, the devil sings
    at mans greed and pride
    and what it brings

    Just lots of useless
    little things

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    Warning Adult content ?

    A full Pirate story or just some Pirated

    It was a cold and stormy night
    And the captain was in his cabin
    And he said First Mate tell me a story
    And the First Mate said
    There was a gun shot in the hills
    The captain turned to the open window
    But too late as he narrowed his eyes
    Suddenly his head snapped back
    Eyes wide open with surprise
    He was dead, shot above his browse
    And the First Mate said
    Was that a poor choice of story opening ?
    Or a coincidence of epic proportions ?

    At this very moment
    The cabin door opened
    And in walked
    An English man, an Irishman
    and a guy carrying a small piano
    With an even smaller man sitting on
    The piano stool that accompanied it
    The Englishman said I thought it odd
    The Irishman, from sure knowledge, said
    It was poor diction

    And the guy carrying the piano sighed deeply
    Perhaps he said just per per perhaps
    It twas my stammer that did it
    Pi pi pi pianist
    Does sound quite sim sim similar to
    Pe pe pe penis
    And the little people
    Do have short attentions spans

    But my wife does not like music much
    And after telling her of the wish and what I asked for
    She has not talked to me in months
    And me I’ve got to take this damn eight inch pianist
    With me every where I go
    If I leave him at home
    Im convinced she will use him as a dildo
    Imagine how sticky the keys will get
    The sound will be completely spoiled

    With this just said the First Mate turned
    Surprised others were in the room
    It was a cold and stormy night
    But he was happy that these three had entered
    Glad they had told him a story
    And not one had heard
    A gun shot from the hills
    Although the eight inch pianist’s life
    Did seem to be in mortal danger

    But then he heard another report
    This could only mean
    Gun shots in the hills
    It was then that the First Mate noticed
    Gasped in surprise
    His head snapped back
    Shock upon his face
    Shot through the head
    Between the eyes no less
    As he faded to black
    Yes too late the story tellers job was done
    And damn his final thought
    I’m two hundred and fifty words short

    Last edited by Gofa; January 1st, 2021 at 12:39 AM.
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    Footnotes on the Hemford Event (597 words)

    1 which, being the “Apex of Summer”, was hot, clear and cloudless

    2 Reports suggested that the two participants (“Ellis” and “Sandy”) had had a longstanding dispute, though this was never divulged whether it concerned land or personal effects or some other business. Some speculated a common romantic interest, but again, it was not clear. Certainly, no-one from the towns around Hemford has come forward as a named person of interest, and no reliable paperwork has been filed on the matter. Stories and myths, however, abound, and provide a curious pattern of their own.

    3 None of the notes and diaries imply that anyone saw them leave to go up into the Sardona, which is the range of hills nearby. That was conjectured from the noise of the gunshot and the fact that they were both absent from the dawn moot.

    4 a stream which parallels the track leading to the Eskins smallholding. Its source is said to be among the northwestern crags of Great Sardona Four, “The Bullock”, though no documents confirm or refute this. It is considered irrelevant.

    5 a hamlet some five hours away by foot, or three hours and seven minutes when ridden at a slow to medium pace (best recorded EX., 1844).

    6 Sheriff Taglia was alerted to this fact by Dr. Priscilla Yatton, who wished it to be duly noted.

    7 (Editions 17 and later) the anomaly was later assumed to be a stray asteroid or comet[evidence required]. The inhabitants of Hemford would have most likely taken it as a heavenly sign, doubtless connected with the other concurrent incident.

    8 A midsummer sun celebration, somewhat akin to Baisakhi or perhaps May Day.

    9 Please refer to the notes on page 514 of the fourth edition (hardback), subsection E, clause iv

    10 This is concordant with an eyewitness report, located an estimated seventy miles southeast of Ludva, and which claimed the “sky went to a darker-than-usual blue”. The individual also reported a drop in temperature and a change in behavior of nearby wildlife (birds, etc.).

    11 Forensic findings have verified that the first gunshot happened approximately five seconds before the impact. Both bullets were later discovered. Only one had its shape deformed, and that but slightly, hence our ongoing investigation.

    12 Two sets of footsteps, anecdotally matching Ellis and Sandy’s profiles as they have been described. One had a mild deviation characteristic of a limp.

    13 A sinusoidal waveform

    14 Here is where they separated. Please note that the event did affect local weather for some time, so the usual patterns and processes may become unreliable/should not be used unless etc.

    15 Markings discovered much later (see editions 46 and after) indicate the crags of Great Sardona Four (“The Bulloch”) [sic] may have been struck by one of the bullets, possibly causing the deformation.

    16 It is the belief of this investigation that both parties (“Sandy” and “Ellis”) are still living and furthermore may have valuable knowledge concerning the event.

    17 This refers to the separate body of work that provides a detailed analysis of spring water and runoffs in the region.

    18 Borriss and Sanchez’s 1876 paper On Ballistics and the Hemford Event conclude that the second gunshot was fired zero-point-three-zero-seven seconds after the impact, but before any sound waves and natural ground undulations would have reached the two participants.

    19 Relatives of Sheriff Taglia dispute this notion (ongoing, 104th Ed.).

    20 A follow-up investigation has been commissioned. Please refer to that when cross-referencing all subsequent materials. Details can be found on page 307. No other survivors are known to exist.

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    Gunshots in the Hills, 650 words

    ‘I’m going out just to clear my head.’

    ‘Take your coat, Honey,’ I told my man.

    He lifted the shot gun from the porch, from the resting place in the umbrella stand. He never took an umbrella. He never was an umbrella sort of a man. And I knew it, him being the only man in my county, me being the only woman, officially.

    Back then even…was when he said to me:

    ‘I’m not an umbrella fella.’

    When he chuckled that first time, irritating.

    ‘Stop it,’ I cried.

    But that was another time when it was raining outside. Not that it rained inside our house. My man is useful in the ways of maintenance.

    One day he takes a hammer. Now why he takes a hammer? ‘Why have you takes a hammer?’ I said up the staircase to him. He never replied even down the stairs.

    ‘Husband!’ I cried, I rushed a level. It was awful worrying the thought of a man with a hammer in a house with no reason. I saw legs emerge from the attic steps.

    ‘Ah, thank goodness you are safe,’ I said, ‘only, why you take a hammer into a lofthouse, when, and you know, I counted nails, you never took nails into the attic?

    He sensed my suspicions.

    ‘I did take nails into the attic. I bought fresh nails on F…f…Friday,’ he stammered…like an asshole.

    ‘You bought fresh nails this F.f.friday? You never told me you bought nails on Friday.’

    ‘I did, I bought a box of fresh nails.’

    ‘And you never ever bought me fresh nails and, and never never?’ I cooed, sashayed, a beautiful lady in a house of chairs and my windows.

    He curled his little fist into a ball. He chewed his little fist with the dirty teeth.

    ‘So you are saying I am not feeding you properly, is that what this is all about?’ I could read the boy’s mind.

    ‘No,’ he said, in this appearance of shame. His fist was red raw.

    ‘You’ll ruin your appetite,’ I softened before the quizling question: ‘Tell me what you doing up there with the hammer up there with your secret box of nails. Why are you crying, Baby?’

    ‘I thought only to drive nails through my eyeballs.’

    ‘So…so you think you’re a new funny man now? You’re not a funny man.’

    A woman cannot worry when a man takes the shot gun into the woods, and is not wearing his coat. I have chores to attend to, until the discharge echoed through those distant trees. The birds flapped, I imagine, over the crescent of beauty. I could smell pine beauty like a toilet wiped with tissue.

    He’s fired that gun, I thought. I truly believed my conclusion. What else was I supposed to think? With nobody else for miles around, and he fires a gun in the woods unsupervised.

    So the second gunshot came as some reassurance.

    Twilight closing in. My chopping board arrangement, my herbs, my spices, my squirrel in the barrel anticipates his drowning before the dinner occasion. ‘Cling to your edge a while longer, fluffy,’ I smiled, sang folk songs of yesteryear to that squirrel.

    And here comes my man down from the forest surrounding.

    The door slams, he shakes the snow, and the sweat I see, soaks his throat through the raspberry kerchief.

    ‘You done something wrong?’ I say in a greeting.

    ‘No,’ he kind of whimpers like a squirrel. And sits at the kitchen table, and begins a whistling. I read him like a book.

    ‘What’s that in your hand, Honeybun? Is that an ear in your hand? You go hunting in the woods and you bring me home an ear?

    Can’t you hear me?

    And what’s that in your shoe?’

    ‘My foot, Baby, my foot.’

    ‘So why’s it with the umbrellas? Drag it over here. Let me look at your foot.’

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    Last edited by rcallaci; January 11th, 2021 at 10:54 PM.
    Nature weeps, the devil sings
    at mans greed and pride
    and what it brings

    Just lots of useless
    little things

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    Rule 2
    The Fletcher Family Hallelujah Bluegrass Band
    (650 words)
    Nature weeps, the devil sings
    at mans greed and pride
    and what it brings

    Just lots of useless
    little things

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    New Year (643 words)


    Without warning, the front door of the cabin swung open and 2020 burst in, slamming the door.

    It was 10:39 p.m. on the last day of the year.

    “She’s trying to kill me! Please! I need help!” he said between gasps for air. Since the year was almost done, he had the appearance of a very old man. And he was winded.

    I stood and confronted him, an iron poker in my hand, his entrance having interrupted my firebox adjustments.

    “Who’s ‘She’?” I said. “Nevermind! I don’t want to know. Get out of my cabin!”

    “Mother Earth,” he said, ignoring me. “She’s coming for me.”

    “Maybe I should kill you myself and do everyone a favor.”

    Old 2020 looked beaten by my words. He slumped against the door in surrender, resignation and sadness in his eyes.

    “I wouldn’t blame you. Really I wouldn’t,” he dropped his eyes to the floor. “I was a terrible year.”

    “Quite the understatement.”

    “Yeah,” said 2020. “I’ve seen the memes.”


    I heard it first, a scuffling outside the door. I stood, keeping the iron poker within reach.

    “What now!”

    There was a light knock, followed by a woman’s scream.

    I rushed to open the door and Mother Earth, pregnant and in the throes of labor fell into the room.

    “What the hell are you doing here? Hey, 2020! Help me get her inside!” I scooped up Mother. Her mouth gritted in pain, her eyes pinched tight.

    2020 sat staring into the fire, unmoved or uncaring. I grunted my irritation and carried her to the bedroom in the back of the cabin.

    “Thank you!” she hissed as I lay her down on the bed.

    “Are you going to be okay? I… I don’t know how to deliver a baby. Tell me what you need.”

    She actually laughed, half in pain, half in amusement.

    “Don’t worry! It’s not my first. Just prop me up with a couple pillows here and I’ll handle the rest.”

    I looked, dumbfounded. She bent forward, her face pinched in sudden pain.

    “You sure?”

    “It looks worse than it feels, Honey!” and looking at the alarm clock-radio playing evening jazz on the nightstand next to the bed, “I’ve still got a good forty-five minutes yet.”

    I hesitated. I didn’t know if she was being brave or stupid. With concern, I noticed my .357 revolver on the nightstand behind the radio. I shrugged and left the room. I took a seat next to 2020 and glared.

    2020, staring into the fire, finally roused himself from the trance and sighed. He looked at me with deep sadness.

    “You think I was bad?” said 2020 with dead eyes. “See what happens when that baby drops.”

    “What the hell is that supposed to mean?”

    2020 slowly turned back to the fire.

    There was silence.

    Then he muttered half to himself, “New Year.”


    I was outside for midnight.

    Gunshots echoed in the hills. They came from the bedroom. A curious squealing laughter followed.

    I pushed inside and ran to the room. I threw open the door.

    On the floor Mother Earth’s unmoving feet stuck out from behind the bed. A pool of blood spread underneath.

    On the radio, news was blaring. A voice on the verge of panic:

    “The North Koreans launched a nuclear strike! Seattle has been vaporized!

    “In New York, aliens landed in Central Park! They are firing high-energy ray beams at citizens and police!

    “An earthquake struck the central and southern coastline of California. Cities still above water are burning and millions are trapped and destitute…”

    On the nightstand, a wobbly toddler 2021 stood dripping blood and after-birth, a smoking gun in hand, and laughing hysterically. When he saw me, he dropped the gun and threw his fat baby arms in the air, shouting in a toothless, squeaky baby voice:

    “Welcome to 2021, Motherfuckers!!!!”

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    Dead Spot (648 wds)
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    The Kibbutz [650 words; content warning]

    Welcome to 1990. The year everything went to hell.

    So here I am, a run-of-the-mill Sayeret Maglan operator, stood in a South Korean village whose name I can't even pronounce, having just smashed an East German paratrooper's head open like a coconut. The plaster smoke is starting to clear, giving me a good view of my late adversary. Given that his face is currently bashed inward and his brains are leaking onto the floor, I get the sense they'll only be identifying the poor fuck through his medical record.

    The dented iron wok I'm holding clangs to the floor and I reclaim my Galil rifle. Making my way outside the house, I realise the fighting has mostly subsided – only the occasional gunshot rings out from the hills to the north. Every now and again the sharp burst of a machine gun retorts, and where that doesn't suffice, the pop-crash of an RPG makes short work of them. It seems the Americans have arrived with reinforcements. About damn time.

    "Sergeant!" I shout to our squad commander. "What's our headcount?"

    "Fifty-two dead. Most of 'em Rosenberg's men. We took out close to ten times that number – Comintern forces mostly. Chinese armour, one of their bombers..."

    "Ha ha!" laughs a paratrooper whose name I don't care to remember, pointing towards the northern hills. "Run back to Berlin, you Red Nazi dickweeds! This is our kibbutz!"

    "Would you shut up?!" I bark at him. "You want them to come back with another bab?!"

    He falls silent with a terrified stare. A 'bab' is a North Korean H-5 Beagle attack aircraft – the Americans have started calling them a shorthand for 'big-ass bomb'. Lately the Norks have gotten into the habit of dusting off these old museum pieces and loading them with the biggest, nastiest bombs the Soviets and Chinese can toss them. The worst I've seen are the 3000-2s, three-tonne dumb bombs that can send Merkava tanks flying across a rice field – often to the detriment of whichever hapless soldier happens to be directly underneath said Merkava when it lands. I'm not as fazed by them as Rosenberg though: anyone who's fought the likes of Hamas for any length of time knows not to underestimate the deadly effectiveness of such simple tactics and weapon systems.

    Technically I'm not even here. Hell, my unit technically doesn't even exist. The only reason we've been caught in the middle of this godforsaken mess is to help train South Korea's own cohort of recon commandos after a spike of incursions and threats from the North. Then came the joint exercise that went to hell after a South Korean frigate accidentally torpedoed a Soviet spy ship. Now I expect that my husband is going to kill me if I ever get back home.

    To be honest, we've had it easy so far. The poor East German I bludgeoned to death in hand to hand combat couldn't say the same. The war in Europe is starting to escalate, putting his family in the firing line. I can only feel sorry for him, and that's something I, the daughter of Holocaust survivors, never thought I'd say out loud. At least we get to choose whose wars to fight.

    "You think they'll come back for more?" I ask the Sergeant.

    "They already have," he growls out. His eyes are focused northward. "Get ready to move!"

    True to his word, more gunshots are ringing out from the hills just beyond the village we've taken to calling 'The Kibbutz'. Sometimes the thunderclap of a Chinese tank gun can be heard over the madness.

    I let out a heavy sigh as I check over my rifle for battle damage once again. These Galils are tough, I'll give the grease monkeys in Ramat HaSharon that much.

    This will be a long day, I deduce as I adjust my beret for the final time.

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