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    KILL IT WITH FIRE (work in progress, 90 seconds)

    Let's try this again.




    This original composition will be my next endeavour.

    This is what I have so far.

    Any input whatsoever would be appreciated.
    My favorite word in the English language is "shenanigans." My favorite thing to do is cause them.

    Smoke weed everyday.

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    Htaf does this have 174 views and no replies?
    My favorite word in the English language is "shenanigans." My favorite thing to do is cause them.

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    The first part and the breakdown are decent although i'm not a huge fan of those kinda dissonent chords i associate with post hardcore that's really just a matter of taste though my favorite metal album is evil invaders by razor if that give you any context(although obviously there is a lot of context left out without the drums and bass) Anyway. I think the part after the breakdown where you do the REALLLLYYYY FASTTTT tremolo picking with fills is fucking sick like awesome job, wasn't expecting that. The stop starty part isn't great in my opinion and it feels like it's the choice of chords there, although i do think it's a good idea to put a stop starty part there, and who knows maybe it would sound great with a whole band, like i said it's a totally different context hearing stuff guitar alone, especially music like this. The outro is awesome, reminds me of melodies from Darkthrone's album panserfaust. Altogether good job! May I ask why you chose a writing forum for feedback on this, not criticizing or anything just curious, as a new writer who's a musician i feel a lottttt more comfortable offering feedback on something like this than on somebody's writing tbh. Anyways cheers!

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    I appreciate the time you took to offer your thoughts.

    I choose to publish my music here mainly because I don't go to any other forums and I prefer not to post music online places where people might steal my shit.

    If you read my blog you'll find a new version with lyrics, which I hope provides context.

    Your musical taste is great btw.
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    So this shit is like 6 minutes long now.

    I swear i just realized what I did was fuck around and write two complete songs and they're both kind of playing at the same time.

    I'm not gonna lie I've been tripping balls off acid for most of the writing process so it kind of shows in the composition.



    I finished the lyrics. Theres still gonna be another guitar solo before the song ends.

    KILL IT WITH FIRE

    [Intro 1]
    [Intro 2]

    [Breakdown]
    I GOT A TORCH
    I GOT SOME GAS
    LIGHT SOME SHIT UP
    TURN IT TO ASH

    [Melody]
    I'm gonna kill you all
    I'm gonna burn this shit down
    There's nowhere you can hide
    My fire never dies

    [Bridge]
    [Solo]
    [Bridge]

    [Melody]
    I've risen above the wreckage of what is left of humanity;
    I know the final answer now, I've seen the truth; the golden key -
    the crimson flame, the scalding wave, my pounding heart; {CONFLAGRATION}
    fear death no more, the pain is gone, let fire take me; {IMMOLATION}

    {DIE!}

    [Guitar solo]

    [Melody]
    Ignition burns; the friction turns the planet earth; the black smoke rises
    on the wind; purge worldy sin - it exists no more in this suffocating silence
    Earth to earth; ashes to ashes; dust to dust; {RESTITUTION}
    Ashes in your mouth; ashes in your eyes; ashes up your ass; {ABSOLUTION}

    {DIE!}

    [Bridge]
    I don't know what the fuck I got to do
    to get it through to you; I'm sick and fucking tired of all the shit you've put me through, and I really hope the last thing I get to smell is the stench of your rotting corpse before the flames engulf me to my death

    [SOLO 1]
    [SOLO 2]

    [Melodic interlude]

    [Breakdown 2]
    OH SHIT

    IT'S STILL LIT

    [Riff]
    Carbon dioxide filling up my lungs and brain; the cold inviting; nerves are severed; screaming; death will numb the pain; burning with anticipation; (a) glass of water my salvation; (I) wish I had (an) asbestos jacket; (does) anybody have a blanket?

    {I'M DYING!}
    [FAST]
    Fire take me, and take away my enemies
    Blackened rubble is all the future's left to see
    Cities crumble to embers down beneath my feet
    Infernal darkness becoming a reality

    Sirens blaring; terror; panic in the streets
    People dying; the holocaust will be complete
    Sacred fire; the scorching blaze consumes your soul
    The pain escapes you in whisps of smoke now lost forevermore

    [Bridge]

    [Solo]

    It will end somehow after this solo thingy I haven't written yet.

    This song is SO FUCKING GOOD.
    My favorite word in the English language is "shenanigans." My favorite thing to do is cause them.

    Smoke weed everyday.

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    Okay, I made it through 16 seconds of pure crap. Is there anything musical after that?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Irwin View Post
    Okay, I made it through 16 seconds of pure crap. Is there anything musical after that?
    The fuck are you talking about?
    My favorite word in the English language is "shenanigans." My favorite thing to do is cause them.

    Smoke weed everyday.

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    Quote Originally Posted by RhythmOvPain View Post
    The fuck are you talking about?
    I apologize for that comment. I was pretty drunk when I posted that. One should never (or at least rarely) post while drunk.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Irwin View Post
    I apologize for that comment. I was pretty drunk when I posted that. One should never (or at least rarely) post while drunk.
    You are forgiven.
    My favorite word in the English language is "shenanigans." My favorite thing to do is cause them.

    Smoke weed everyday.

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    Now up to 7 minutes long. The final guitar solo is being worked on.
    My favorite word in the English language is "shenanigans." My favorite thing to do is cause them.

    Smoke weed everyday.

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