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    animal delusions

    it's waining
    wabbits
    walking apes
    maybe the cwows
    will wite
    poetwy
    Last edited by escorial; March 5th, 2020 at 10:01 AM. Reason: wizardist poem ever
    The only one who can heal you is you.




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    They do write poetry. Just ask Poe.

    I think this is a nice, simple poem.

    Maybe try making the imagery more vivid? I think it's missing the sinew to bring the rain, wabbits, walking apes, and crows together.
    Last edited by Smith; February 21st, 2020 at 04:23 AM.
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    Esc, your second line begs for more word-play:

    it's waining
    wabbits
    rocking apes
    maybe the cwows
    will write
    poetwy

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    Tim -- you missed one:

    will
    wite
    ​poetwy



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    thanks guy's....

    it's waining
    wabbits
    walking apes
    maybe the cwows
    will wite
    poetwy
    The only one who can heal you is you.




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    Haha! Good one.

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    I do like this one and I did get a little help... it's my most wizardist of poem yet...
    The only one who can heal you is you.




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    You can never trust cousin Crow, for he is a notorious trickster.

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    nevermore......
    The only one who can heal you is you.




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    A lil' looney-toon tune! 10.3/10.5!

    I love lil' bits like this, it is all about personality with this one. There's action, commentary, thought-provocation and it allows readers to laugh with you making some fun of yourself, your culture, all neatly wrapped up in a proverbial bubble. Neat!

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