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    pool

    Hey Babe,
    How are you?
    It's been so long since I hung around.
    Sometimes I'm a terrible person
    staring at my own dread whirlpool.
    But it's so...
    Last edited by Kevin; September 13th, 2019 at 02:38 PM.

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    I like it, the shortness, the brevity of it surprised me, the first three lines make perfect sense to me personally. Then the explanation - the reason for the absence. Preoccupations. At first I wanted to read more, but in hindsight I like the way you finished it. 'But its so...' its so... yeah I like that. It fits. All the best P

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