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    Mr. Wax Wings


    Mr. Wax Wings way up there

    With the sunlight in your hair
    Are you rising up or are you coming down?
    Are you lost or are you found?

    Forever falling from the height
    Forever clinging to the light
    Was it worth it, Mr. Wax Wings,
    To be so close to the sun?

    Mr. Wax Wings did you hear
    The warnings in your boyish ears?
    Did you understand what the old man said?
    Oh, I do believe you did.

    You weighed the decades on the scales
    And you spread your colored sails
    You said, “I’ll go up with my wax wings
    To be so close to the sun.”

    I saw you drowning in the sea
    With the foam upon your cheeks
    With a smile on your face and love in your eyes
    Ever melding with the light.

    Mr. Wax Wings, as you fall,
    You know that you’ve exchanged it all
    For that treasure, Mr. Wax Wings—
    To be so close to the sun.

    "So long is the way to the unknown, long is the way we have come. . ." ~ Turisas, Five Hundred and One

    "[An artist is] an idiot babbling through town. . .crying, 'Dreams, dreams for sale! Two for a kopek, two for a song; if you won't buy them, just take them for free!'" ~ Michael O' Brien,
    Sophia House

    Christ is risen from the dead,
    trampling on Death by death,
    And on those in the tombs,
    lavishing light.



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    Was it worth it, Mr. Wax Wings,
    To be so close to the sun?

    Becomes

    Mr Wax Wings, what have you done?
    Now you've flown too close to the sun.
    You can never hate something so thoroughly as that which destroys what you love, and who is more guilty of this crime than the stranger who was once a lover?

  3. #3
    I really liked this as lyrics. Icarus, right? =)

    My favourite part:

    "I saw you drowning in the sea

    With the foam upon your cheeks
    With a smile on your face and love in your eyes
    Ever melding with the light.

    Mr. Wax Wings, as you fall,
    You know that you’ve exchanged it all
    For that treasure, Mr. Wax Wings—
    To be so close to the sun."

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    andrewclumm - thanks for the read! I'm not sure how I feel about your suggested change since it would disrupt the flow. However, I can see the need to pull it full circle in the last stanza -- I could say "And it was worth it, Mr. Wax Wings / To be so close the sun" ?

    Bard_Daniel - Yup, Icarus! A somewhat different take on the myth, though. Thanks!
    "So long is the way to the unknown, long is the way we have come. . ." ~ Turisas, Five Hundred and One

    "[An artist is] an idiot babbling through town. . .crying, 'Dreams, dreams for sale! Two for a kopek, two for a song; if you won't buy them, just take them for free!'" ~ Michael O' Brien,
    Sophia House

    Christ is risen from the dead,
    trampling on Death by death,
    And on those in the tombs,
    lavishing light.



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    Shouldn't there be a chorus?

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    Perhaps I'm missing something what made him fly so close to the Sun is his exuberance snd feelings of love or what

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    @Princesisto The repeated last line is kind of the chorus.

    @Gwenni63 Yes, it's his love for the sun. Like a moth flying into a lamp.
    "So long is the way to the unknown, long is the way we have come. . ." ~ Turisas, Five Hundred and One

    "[An artist is] an idiot babbling through town. . .crying, 'Dreams, dreams for sale! Two for a kopek, two for a song; if you won't buy them, just take them for free!'" ~ Michael O' Brien,
    Sophia House

    Christ is risen from the dead,
    trampling on Death by death,
    And on those in the tombs,
    lavishing light.



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    I saw you drowning in the sea
    With the foam upon your cheeks
    '

    great line

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