One of the disciplines you get to master on your road to writing is Economy of Words.
It's a toughie. How do you paint the scene and characters without going on forever?
One of my faves for this talent was Ray Bradbury. He could tell a whole book in 30 pages.
It's just one of the things that you gotta learn in the first 200,000 words of practice.
Without seeing your writing, based on what you told us, I'd say focus on character development and scene illustration, and once you master those two, your Economy of Words will improve.
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