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  1. #1

    slaves

    more slaves now
    you're probably unaware
    walking past one
    it's still illegal
    Last edited by escorial; May 17th, 2019 at 09:46 PM.
    The only one who can heal you is you.




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    Modern slavery is a worthy subject for one of your slice of life poems esc. I wonder if that last line would work better if you mention the hidden pain of the victims rather than the fact it's illegal. After all, when we hear of a case on the news it's the suffering that we connect with, rather than the fact that it's against the law. Good subject to write about though.

    In line 2 your should be you're.

  3. #3
    Thanks JTP....wrote it after reading about sweatshops in Leicester and how hidden these people must feel as if they don't exist an nobody cares...cheers
    The only one who can heal you is you.




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