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    Originally Posted by dannyboy strong work - and the delusion we sometimes carry - the internal picture compared to the truth.
    Thank you, Danny. Yes, that internal picture dived into - like going down the rabbit hole. This poem was intended to be a kind of dark "Walter Mitty".

    "There are two kinds of light-
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    the glare that obscures" James Thurber
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    Great poem, Laurie. Reminds me when back in the day I road the bus to work; the experience led me to my first novel and more than one poem. One young man, obvious from his herky-jerky movements, must have had some kind of medical condition yet road the bus daily, always had a smile on his face and friendly and couldn't help but ponder on his situation. I not only wrote a poem but put him as a character in my novel. People watching is still on my agenda.
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    Originally Posted by Midnightpoet Great poem, Laurie. Reminds me when back in the day I road the bus to work; the experience led me to my first novel and more than one poem. One young man, obvious from his herky-jerky movements, must have had some kind of medical condition yet road the bus daily, always had a smile on his face and friendly and couldn't help but ponder on his situation. I not only wrote a poem but put him as a character in my novel. People watching is still on my agenda.
    Tony, I always love the stories you share. And this one especially!

    When working in Manhattan, I rode the bus to work. Every morning there was a young woman (about my age, then). She was always dressed in a black sheath and with a black cloth she'd sniff glue from. She'd rant at all the passengers about corrupt society...up in this person's or that person's face.

    I eventually wrote an allegorical short story about her, titled "The Glue Lady of Second Avenue". I gave her a happy ending. And for the life of me I cannot find it. Now, you've given me incentive to go at it and find her!

    Thanks, Tony
    “The man who cannot visualize a horse galloping on a tomato is an idiot.”
    Andre Breton

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    Good poem!!

    All it takes is
    the 6:45
    to feel almost whole

    could you explain this part more?

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    Whoahhhh! A question left unanswered - I must have been away, Jing Joy, when you posted. So sorry, but here it is -
    All it takes is
    the 6:45
    to feel almost whole

    could you explain this part more?
    The man commutes back and forth from home to work on a train everyday. During his one hour traveling each night after, let's say, working a menial job he spends this precious time alone away from ungratifying work and home life, imagining himself to be someone he is not. Someone who is whole - repleate with confidence. All it takes for this man to have this imagining is that one hour train ride which departs at 6:45 pm.

    If you have any questions or more, just shoot! And welcome to WF! Laurie
    “The man who cannot visualize a horse galloping on a tomato is an idiot.”
    Andre Breton

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    duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuude!!!!!
    i see the horse!
    i see the tomato!
    i see the clock become tears upon branch!
    but this,
    this IS!

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    Familiar strangers
    look right through him
    though not as through a keyhole
    which holds promise of
    forbidden mystery
    but as if through a cloud
    self-distracted and somehow blind.

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    Hi, -xXx-. Able to get back to you today. Sorry for the delay. Love your reference to Dali! You quoted the gist of reality... Thanks! Laurie
    “The man who cannot visualize a horse galloping on a tomato is an idiot.”
    Andre Breton

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