TuesdayEve #20 & #21 NaPo 2019

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    TuesdayEve #20 & #21 NaPo 2019

    #20

    a budding oak branch
    seized by black feet
    caw caw caw

    #21

    a golden crown
    thrones a honey bee
    first dandelion

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    #21

    nice shorty - but the final line sounds separate - like an obvious explanation tacked on.
    look for connections to lift the poem.

    interesting you chose crown and throne, which have royal connotations.
    what is the bee doing? collecting nectar. who for? the queen bee. there's your connection

    a golden crown
    thrones a honey bee ------ enthrones?
    collecting nectar
    for the queen
    grasp the mettle of things unsaid
    and strike the nail upon the head

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    You’re right, it is a little obvious,
    I was trying to capture the moment....
    I like enthrones

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