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  1. #21
    *sorry, lots of obligations*
    Quote Originally Posted by escorial View Post
    What energy do you expunge the most...
    today i'll go with the furies
    Quote Originally Posted by escorial View Post
    i'm expunged
    claiming the superposition
    linking/containing an inseparable
    object-(is)-subject
    (a popular relationship
    of momentary convenience,
    expunging machiavelli
    by calling upon
    the theoretical concept of like.ness substitution),
    i-you-all command you to unexpunge you.ness!
    *with sandwiches and other-rights-thereof-granted*
    *oh yeah, and same for all that i-you-all hold dear*

    and i like your poem
    OP/Mod content waiver request wrapper, re:forms
    jussayin'

  2. #22
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    Hmm. Are you trying to be Rupi Kaur? This poem is so small, which is obviously your intention, but still... Maybe try doing longer poems?

  3. #23
    I have an do write longer stuff but I do prefer the minimum use of words....
    The only one who can heal you is you.




  4. #24
    According to the 2nd law of thermodynamics, the energy you produce is not eternal. It dissipates over time and winds down to steady state. Energy is eventually lost
    However, the molecules in your body may well last forever as stardust.


    I agree with Darren about cutting 'living.' It's implied in the verb 'go on.' I disagree with Oily about changing 'I' to 'living.' The first person in this case is universal. It refers to everyone. It could even refer to God.

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