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    Penny for the Guy?

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    Nobody took any notice
    of the children or their motives.
    Not yet teenagers,
    never mind the dangers
    taking money from strangers
    to buy explosives.
    Last edited by ned; October 31st, 2018 at 04:37 PM.

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    I feel like this could be reworked into a limerick fairly easily, and considering the punch at the end, it's a fitting form for the theme of the piece.
    I find that my lack of knowledge can sometimes be an asset in that I'm forced to try new things because I don't have any other options.

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    hello Andrew - thank you for reading and commenting.

    yes, it could be a limerick - but wouldn't that be boring....

    if you must, simply append the final line to the penultimate.

    Voila!.............................Ned

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    Well done. A sad and timely poem. I usually prefer Internal Rhyming but yours works for me.

    Uncertain, but I think this might be correct.

    Nobody took any notice
    of the children nor their motives.
    A fine piece. Laurie
    “The man who cannot visualize a horse galloping on a tomato is an idiot.”
    Andre Breton

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