Except Tonight

Results 1 to 8 of 8

Thread: Except Tonight

  1. #1

    Except Tonight



    Except Tonight


    by musichal


    Not a word, not a sigh,
    have I heard since our goodbye.

    Nor have I tried to call, it's true.
    Alone tonight and feeling blue,
    not even once have I missed you.
    Except tonight.

    Out of sight, out of mind,
    damn your flight, and damn your eyes.

    I never loved at all, not you.
    Or maybe so, a month or two,
    but nevermore, for we are through.
    Except tonight.


    Last edited by musichal; July 16th, 2018 at 02:16 PM.

    How sweet the moonlight sleeps upon this bank!
    Here will we sit, and let the sounds of music
    Creep into our ears: soft stillness and the night
    Become the touches of sweet harmony.

    - Shakespeare,
    Merchant...Act 5


  2. #2
    I am a pariah.

    How sweet the moonlight sleeps upon this bank!
    Here will we sit, and let the sounds of music
    Creep into our ears: soft stillness and the night
    Become the touches of sweet harmony.

    - Shakespeare,
    Merchant...Act 5


  3. #3
    In what society, the burnt poets society? Heh, that effin Nano...nano-whatever/30-poems-in-30-days-or-else burnt them out. Ffftt... out. No more fires.
    I said right off yes, I feel the pressure, but no I'm not doing it. As if I knew that would happen, but I didn't. Glad, am I though that I effin Yoda'd though it.
    Last edited by Kevin; July 19th, 2018 at 02:12 PM.

  4. #4
    hello - this poem does well in capturing that moment, that dilemna -
    when fragile resolve dissolves into genuine feelings.

    at once, dishonest and honest, nicely done..............Ned

  5. #5
    A well done poem that captures that sad, solemn moment of longing for someone who has gone. That delicate balance of willpower and caving. I thoroughly enjoyed this one, well done!

  6. #6
    Reading the poem aloud and taking it in, it has a great flow. I liked the rhyming in the poetry, which is well balanced. You gave a sense of feeling in a very short, beautiful poem.

  7. #7
    Musichal - With human beings, a "definite" always seem to come with an "exception". It's in our nature. Enjoyed. Namyh

  8. #8
    Member
    Join Date
    Aug 2018
    Location
    Texas, United States
    Posts
    60
    its so good, I have a weird feeling something here would help

    "Alone tonight and feeling <------> blue,"

    probably because using blue to express sadness seems so overdone, and at least for me, a more defined type of blue would pop more. the whole dMN poem is good tho, this is me trying to find fault in it


Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •  
This website uses cookies
We use cookies to store session information to facilitate remembering your login information, to allow you to save website preferences, to personalise content and ads, to provide social media features and to analyse our traffic. We also share information about your use of our site with our social media, advertising and analytics partners.