An Exercise in Epigrams

[mayko]

I was challenged to write 3 poems in the style of an epigram, so here they are.

Mostly I'm interested in how a reader experiences these poems and advice on tone and form are always helpful!

Brevity really isn't my strong suit, so this is a challenge in that respect.

Feel free to comment on all three poems, just one, or none at all. Whatever takes your fancy ;)

7.6
7 billion other people on the planet
he said
Yeah well fuck those guys
I said



Unsure
The world is full of sorrow--
The sky is full of stars--


I’m not yet sure what this means.



A Week
If it took six days to make the earth
And another one to rest,
Surely the architect must be impressed
When we destroy it in less

[Pelwrath]

ep·i·gram

[ˈepəˌɡram]




NOUN

• a pithy saying or remark expressing an idea in a clever and amusing way.
  
  Mayko;
  I had to look this up and this is interesting as a form of poetry. I love "Unsure". "A Week" is an excellent philosophical statement and "7.6" did bring a chuckle. I'd say you nailed it, so well done.
  
  

[jenthepen]

I think you have made a great job of these, mayko and I love your dry sense of humour. My favourite is Unsure. I enjoyed the way the reader is pulled in to wonder about the meaning and then WHAM the final line knocks everything down again. It makes it funny and brilliant all at the same time.

[mayko]

Thanks! I was pleasantly surprised by your response,as Unsure was the one I was (fittingly) the least sure of XD

[mayko]

Hey, thanks for your lovely comments!
If you're interested in the form (and haven't already found it), Stephen Crane's A Man Said to the Universe is one of my favorite epigrams, and of course anything by Oscar Wilde is brilliant.

[jenthepen]

Thanks, mayko! I'll check that out.