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  1. #21
    I liked this start and would have read more if there were more to read! Though for myself it would certainly be more engaging with (as others said) there were more showing, less telling.

  2. #22
    Too much telling my friend. Also I like the pacing though but it fell flat for me. I liked the line tugging her skirt though.

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