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    #1 Through Broken Glass

    Wet stone to steel,
    cunning and wit,
    his pocket knife.
    Different mother
    no less my brother.


    Adrenaline, adventures,
    antlered pathways,
    lures, lairs, trigger hairs.
    Academic liquidity,
    future, mortgaged to sell high.


    How passion twist and tumbled step,
    give rise, self fulfilling prophecy.
    Your truth, with such bitter gait.
    Each season offers change,
    seeing only winterís empty trees.


    Through your prison window see,
    this world, moving to be?
    Your thorny chair of discontent.
    Because, your resentful perspective,
    A puzzled chapter, youíve become old friend.

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    a poem that needs more than one read....like the structure and the use of single words to highlight a thought,emotion ,idea..ect....kind of writing were the reader takes what they want from it regardless of the writers meaning..great read
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    The challenges of this poem, as a reader are: just what is a prison? A home? Marriage? Job? Then: who is a prisoner? I enjoyed this each time I read it. Thanks.
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    I like the jagged edges of this poem.
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    A lifetime of changes and different perspectives came through for me. An interesting and intriguing poem.

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    Quote Originally Posted by hikerpoet View Post
    [FONT="]Wet stone to steel,[/FONT]
    [FONT="]cunning and wit,[/FONT]
    [FONT="]his pocket knife. [/FONT]
    [FONT="]Different mother [/FONT]
    [FONT="]no less my brother. [/FONT]
    [FONT="]
    [/FONT]

    [FONT="]Adrenaline, adventures,[/FONT]
    [FONT="]antlered pathways, [/FONT]
    [FONT="]lures, lairs, trigger hairs. [/FONT]**** LOVE the lyrical sound in this line....
    [FONT="]Academic liquidity, [/FONT]
    [FONT="]future, mortgaged to sell high. [/FONT]
    [FONT="]
    [/FONT]

    [FONT="]How passion twist and tumbled step,[/FONT]
    [FONT="]give rise, self fulfilling prophecy. [/FONT]
    [FONT="]Your truth, with such bitter gait. [/FONT]
    [FONT="]Each season offers change,[/FONT]
    [FONT="]seeing only winterís empty trees. [/FONT]
    [FONT="]
    [/FONT]

    [FONT="]Through your prison window see,[/FONT]
    [FONT="]this world, moving to be?[/FONT]
    [FONT="]Your thorny chair of discontent. [/FONT]**** and this... fabulous
    [FONT="]Because, your resentful perspective, [/FONT]
    [FONT=""]A puzzled chapter, youíve become old friend.[/FONT]
    Love your poetic language....sublime...
    She lost herself in the trees,
    among the ever-changing leaves.
    She wept beneath the wild sky
    as stars told stories of ancient times.
    The flowers grew toward her light,
    the river called her name at night.
    She could not live an ordinary life,
    with the mysteries of the universe
    hidden in her eyes....
    Author: Christy Ann Martine

    Death leaves a heartache no one can heal,
    love leaves a memory no one can steal....
    Author unknown.

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    The impression from your use of words is so striking. I think that this is wonderful in that it can me looked at from different perspectives. Nicely done!
    ďIt's weird not to be weird." ó John Lennon

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    Thank you for sharing this poem with us hiker, it flowed nicely and drew me from line to line. I like the imagery you have used.
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