Firemajic's NaPoWriMo 2018 - Page 2


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  1. #11
    Through the kaleidoscope, pictures from my past....

    #2
    Deceiving The Lamb

    Harry watched the innocent lamb
    with her heart as pure as snow
    he kept his intentions hidden
    and never let her know

    Harry was a patient man
    he waited and he watched
    and vowed he would have the lamb
    he would not be stopped

    Then one night he caught the lamb
    SHHH!!!!! NO one must ever know
    and what he said and did that night
    filled her heart with woe

    He stripped away her childhood
    left her shattered in her small bed
    wounded, defiled and bleeding
    sheets stained in hues of red

    She lost herself in the trees,
    among the ever-changing leaves.
    She wept beneath the wild sky
    as stars told stories of ancient times.
    The flowers grew toward her light,
    the river called her name at night.
    She could not live an ordinary life,
    with the mysteries of the universe
    hidden in her eyes....
    Author: Christy Ann Martine

    Death leaves a heartache no one can heal,
    love leaves a memory no one can steal....
    Author unknown.

  2. #12
    I love the way you have learned to strip away the pretense, fear and shame that holds back the innocent and prevents them from sharing their pain and terror. I applaud this series of poems that you have planned to catalogue the events of your childhood and I hope it helps you, as it will help many others who come and read your words.

    I'm not repelled by your use of vivid description in the final stanza but I wonder if some imagery around this graphic scene might actually increase the shock of the awful truth of it?

  3. #13
    I hear what you are saying, jen.... and I agree... but my thought was .... like this... he was in the background... unobtrusive... quiet... plotting... waiting, and the lamb was unaware... so I saved the imagery for when he revealed his true identity...that night...does that make sense?
    She lost herself in the trees,
    among the ever-changing leaves.
    She wept beneath the wild sky
    as stars told stories of ancient times.
    The flowers grew toward her light,
    the river called her name at night.
    She could not live an ordinary life,
    with the mysteries of the universe
    hidden in her eyes....
    Author: Christy Ann Martine

    Death leaves a heartache no one can heal,
    love leaves a memory no one can steal....
    Author unknown.

  4. #14

  5. #15
    Through the kaleidoscope, pictures from my past
    # 3

    The Eye Of The Lie

    SEE? A picture of the wolf in sheep's clothing!
    He wore it very well
    NO one saw his deception
    and the lamb would never tell....

    Everyone trusted the wolf
    with his kind cheerful face
    and the monster hiding underneath
    there was not a single trace

    Photographs are deceptive
    and never show the lie
    everyone is just as blind
    as the camera's eye....
    She lost herself in the trees,
    among the ever-changing leaves.
    She wept beneath the wild sky
    as stars told stories of ancient times.
    The flowers grew toward her light,
    the river called her name at night.
    She could not live an ordinary life,
    with the mysteries of the universe
    hidden in her eyes....
    Author: Christy Ann Martine

    Death leaves a heartache no one can heal,
    love leaves a memory no one can steal....
    Author unknown.

  6. #16

  7. #17
    Dear Fire,
    Let it all hang out, girlfriend. I feel a cleansing not
    only for you but for others...the words must be heard.
    And, I know I’ve said it before, but I think what you’re
    doing and saying is very brave, exposing the experience
    and shedding the attached emotions.

    Also, in these poems, I think the rhyming adds to the
    innocence.

  8. #18
    Quote Originally Posted by TuesdayEve View Post

    Also, in these poems, I think the rhyming adds to the
    innocence.
    Yes... I wanted them to sound like nursery rhymes... thank you
    She lost herself in the trees,
    among the ever-changing leaves.
    She wept beneath the wild sky
    as stars told stories of ancient times.
    The flowers grew toward her light,
    the river called her name at night.
    She could not live an ordinary life,
    with the mysteries of the universe
    hidden in her eyes....
    Author: Christy Ann Martine

    Death leaves a heartache no one can heal,
    love leaves a memory no one can steal....
    Author unknown.

  9. #19
    #2: I applaud your courage and your poem, a very good rhyme, simple words to conquer a powerful memory.#3: Blindness is a physical liability as much as it is a familial one. No Divine Comedy but just perhaps, Virgil has guided your hand.
    "Illegitimi non carborundum " Vinegar' Joe Stilwell

    "Faith is taking the first step, even when you don't see the whole staircase." Martin Luther King Jr.

    What you learn in life is important, those you help learn, are more important.

    "They can because they think they can."
    ​Virgil

    "Wise men speak because they have something to say; Fools will speak to say something." Plato

    "The only difference between reality and fiction is that fiction needs to be credible."
    ​ Mark Twain

    "To those of you who received honors, awards and distinctions, I say well done. And to the C students, I say you, too, can be president of the United States." George W. Bush



  10. #20
    Fire, I admire your poetry, the courage, and the poetic language, all together. This Kaleidoscope series you are writing, is going to be an awesome series.

    And maybe, one day, I might....
    Hidden Content

    وَنَحْنُ نُحِبُّ الحَيَاةَ إذَا مَا اسْتَطَعْنَا إِلَيْهَا سَبِيلاَ
    "we love life, if it allows us to walk down her road"
    -Mahmoud Darwish (translation: Darren White)


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