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    thank you Danny - sorry to hear about your relations, no doubt, the condition effects different people in different ways -
    I can only speak from my experience......Ned

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    Any poem's voice can certainly make or break the poem, while clarity offers flow of content as music.

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    hello - thank you TL for taking the trouble to rewrite my poem - as I read it, every aspect seems to be weaker.

    this poem has to be in first-person, not to draw sympathy, but to put the reader in with the visitor.
    where the real emotion lies, hopefully..................Ned

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    This reminds me of a poem I have written recently.Same Subject.

  9. #39
    Quote Originally Posted by TL Murphy View Post
    Glad I could help.
    shouldn't that be "Glad could help" ?

    if you want to try an exercise - I'm sure there is a local gym available...

    hello Miraj - welcome to the pedantic poetry forum -

    when taking the trouble to comment, you might as well say something relevant.

    perplexed as ever............Ned
    Last edited by ned; January 18th, 2018 at 01:30 PM.

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    This is truly masterful, Ned. I have not read your poetry before because I guess I just donít come around to this group, but this makes me want to read more! Beautiful.
    I don't play with words; words play with me...

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