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    Reminds me a bit of the character Dexter on tv, easy to read and concise!

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    Nice!

    Two problems: I lost myself around the third paragraph, and I had to go reread the second paragraph to figure out what was going on. Maybe that's just me. William, the doctor, seemed a little too cold, even for a doctor.

    Otherwise, great!

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