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    Ginger

    I'm a blondey, curley headed scratchy girl
    I love to get scratched all around my curls
    under my collar, under my chin
    over my belly, over within
    the crease between my neck and my ears
    the base of my tail, my chest interfers
    reaching my armpits they never get scatched
    between my front legs, thats all that I ask

    I hum when I'm happy, I bark at the birds
    the cardinals and grakels are acting absurd
    the chip monks and squirrels are acting like fools
    of course I complain but Gayle over rules

    If we're all done here I think I'll go bug
    Ziggy von Ziggy and give him a hug

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    Cute! I think this might be the kind of thing that would work well with pictures (that would also clarify who Gayle and Ziggy Von Ziggy are).

    This part--
    Quote Originally Posted by TuesdayEve View Post
    the crease between my neck and my ears
    the base of my tail, my chest interfers
    reaching my armpits they never get scatched
    between my front legs, thats all that I ask
    --is a little awkward. Maybe it's just me, but the rhyme gets a little lost there and it seems like a lot of focus on a less significant detail (scratching).

    Also, one other small thing: "chip monks" should be "chipmunks."
    "So long is the way to the unknown, long is the way we have come. . ." ~ Turisas, Five Hundred and One

    "[An artist is] an idiot babbling through town. . .crying, 'Dreams, dreams for sale! Two for a kopek, two for a song; if you won't buy them, just take them for free!'" ~ Michael O' Brien,
    Sophia House

    Christ is risen from the dead,
    trampling on Death by death,
    And on those in the tombs,
    lavishing light.



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    Yes you’re right it’s chipmunks, not monks with chips.
    I wrote it fast and didn’t notice the misspell...
    the lines you’re refering to, in fact the whole poem,
    was meant to be read fast. Ziggy von Ziggy as well.
    Both were for Gayle, their owner. And after writing
    them, thought they might be better in the childrens
    section. Never thought of pictures, good idea...
    now if I can figure out how to do that...
    Ziggy’s thread should be under this one or near by.
    Thanks for your review, I appriciate it,

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